me and my metal

[plain mango]

uhhh so tw again and sorry for the people that have seen my previous three poems

[umbral valley]

Really good
I struggle with giving feedback to such poems
Bc it’s something I haven’t experienced
But you do an amazing job conveying it

[frozen raft]

i love how you've defined the relationship between a person and the tool they use. it's perceived as something so beautiful, so exclusive — contrasting the reality of what it actually is.

the trance one falls into is incomparable to any other feeling, and is complex.

your poem beautifully describes all of that. well done.

[austere pendant]

This is…wow. I don’t really know what to say except that I absolutely love the line “as her sweet, sharp kisses drag across my skin I have to hold back my hisses inspecting the mark of crimson lip stick” it’s really good use of wording, in my opinion

[plain mango]

@austere pendant @frozen raft kicking my feet giggling thank you :3

[austere pendant]

Ahh of course! It’s amazing, tbh! If you don’t mind, I have a poem I would like feedback on as well, it’s posted in #🖇・poetry-feedback-help

[fierce karma]

the text makes it hard to read but it's an ok poem...good draft i think