Froggyesque's Short Poem #2

[verbal vine]

Soul of breath gets turned to ash on a tray

I'd just have it as ash on tray because it's still perfectly understandable but it flows together better with the next line that way

I like how fancy your words and metaphors are

[graceful agate]

Yeah you're right but I just added that for a syllable

[verbal vine]

Are your syllable counts specific?

[graceful agate]

No 😭

I vocalise it though

And I add/remove stuff depending on the flow

But man am I bad at math

😭

[verbal vine]

See I narrate poetry regularly so I can recognize flow and that one a was awkward so unless you need it

Angel choirs and painful fires form a line In which the servant is served

This is insanely good

[devout stirrup]

Wonderful! @graceful agate has just progressed to level 3!