#Ashes

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wide granite
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Trust eroded, trust is gone
I sit atop this lonely throne
A throne of lies, a throne of scorn
The nest's empty, this bird has flown

Truth is sacred, truth is holy
All you had to do was trust me
But your fear and your folly
Led me to leave far too early.

You tried with empty words to relieve
The pain haunting my aching soul
But from the pain, there's no reprieve
Your love extracts a heavy toll.

And still you sit across from me
And speak of love and need
You try to hide, yet still I see
The way you cry, the way you bleed

Hold me close, don't let me go
Don't let what we have die
Don't speak the truth that we both know
I can't, yet, say goodbye

The very flame that fueled our passion
Fueled our fiery rise,
Did burn our love, then turn it ashen,
Crashed down in broken cries.

You were once my joy, my precious light
My guiding flame, my fleeting peace
But what is light to him who's lost sight?
Darkness is his life; it is all he sees.

Maybe your candle burned so bright
That it was what destroyed my sight
With every slight and every fight,
I fell into that starless night.

What once was home is now my jail
My salvation is now my doom
We try to work but always fail
This cycle has to stop, and soon.

And now we're done, yet you're still there
I hear you laugh, but not for me,
I look away like I don't care,
And storm away- but quietly.

I yearn to feel your love again,
To press your head against my chest,
To breathe with you as I did then,
To be, at last, at ease, to rest.

I write this ode in verse to say
The words I could not let you hear
The words I long to say, everyday
I still love you, my dear.

wind flameBOT
wide granite
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@willow pulsar check this one out, it's a different kind of poem

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@tardy ether my first and only attempt at this sorta poem

mystic blazeBOT
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*@akaryun my

first and only attempt at

this sorta poem*

- hobo100
wide granite
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did i veer too far into cringe or is it fine?

tardy ether
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Yk I can give u a Tip if you'd like

wide granite
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go ahead

willow pulsar
tardy ether
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Write your poems on a page, stanza by stanza
bcs at that time Your brain is flowing with words it will write so many deep meaning rhymes

Then once u are done See if u can shuffle the stanzas like It's good but u are breaking the flow it can be corrected if u will write in A good order

wind flameBOT
willow pulsar
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gem em some time to read it

wide granite
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thank you, fam

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i actually did shuffle these stanzas around quite a bit

tardy ether
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Once u are done writing just fix the stanzas z place it on ten right sides

wide granite
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there was no clear narrative in my head

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what order wud u put them in

tardy ether
wide granite
tardy ether
wide granite
tardy ether
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Lmao I'll leave it to your imagination blud

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Bcs if I try fixing I'll fix it as how i write things it won't be your poem anymore

willow pulsar
wide granite
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hm

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lemme see if i can shuffle it around again

wide granite
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slightly more consistent rhyme scheme here @pulsar slate

wide granite
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@frail willow similar theme as urs

limber widget
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nice work

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I like it:>

wide granite
limber widget
wide granite
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mine happened 6 months ago

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i cudn't write, tho, creativity dried up after leaving her

mystic blazeBOT
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*i cudn't write, tho,

creativity dried up

after leaving her*

- hobo100
wide granite
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this is the second poem i've written after 0 poetry or any writing of any sort for 2 years

limber widget
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lemme read it

wide granite
wide granite
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@wide granite less cheesy more emo, but still, here ya go

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LMAO OKAY

wide granite
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One thing I GOT to say bro, that this really feels like a stake through the chest of a vampire. It’s not that someone can feel the raw emotion through every line, god it really just embeds into like embroidery. Man you got me remembering stuff I don’t want to remember </3. The heartbreak, the longing, the frustration, it’s so honest and real. The way you describe love and loss, it’s truly beautiful in such a painful way. Now this is what I meant, i wouldn’t call it emo no, this is what true love feels like when let go. You really hit with each and every line, Ish. :)

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Such amazing work, you really amaze me with your way of words :)

wide granite
wide granite
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I’ll check it out later (gym time hehehe) but I feel like you’ll kill me with your words Ish

wide granite
vale rivet
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Your poem carries a strong lyrical flow, with rhyme and rhythm that give it a timeless, almost Shakespearean quality. The imagery of thrones, flames, candles, and darkness adds weight and keeps the theme consistent. It beautifully conveys betrayal, longing, and grief, while still letting the reader feel the depth of love beneath the pain. Some stanzas are especially powerful, like “Maybe your candle burned so bright / That it was what destroyed my sight.” At times, the rhymes become predictable, which slightly softens the impact you could vary the scheme or condense a few lines for sharper delivery. But overall, it’s heartfelt, tragic, and deeply resonant, leaving the reader with a lingering ache.

wide granite