@gray geode
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#Again and again
void thorn
paper galleon
I love this very much Ave. One of the most enjoyable thing about it (which is obv but I'll restate it bc I can 
) is the Never again in the first part, then we have Never again. Again here it shows exactly what was described, trying to forget, yet it repeats again, the 3rd part, the remembrance is stronger with 2 again then one Never again . And the last cuts deep. However much Never again there was, it never beats the again I find this beautiful as it shows the inner monolog of the narrator. And the last part stitches everything together, it's an important skill in poetry to make the ending hit as hard as the start. Love it! 10/10
void thorn
@digital peak
digital peak
Hits like a ton of bricks
Especially the last three lines
second stanza also hits me too
actually i'm more understanding the last line too
the "again" can refer to multiple things
including finding yourself in the mirror asking yourself the same question
something that becomes routine
and thats... realistic for everybody i think
That's what depression does
I also hope you can feel clean again someday my friend. Anything can change
This poem touched my heart ❤️
paper galleon
Funnily enough, I can imagine this completely. That's probably the best kind of poems when you can imagine the scenes perfectly. Bc in the start the narrator is trying to sleep, they are turning and flipping in bed, on the desk near them, there's an empty mug of coffee. Thoughts and memories replay in their head constantly, they try to convince themselves to escape, "I just need to escape those thoughts", they then try to cover their heads and tighten the sheets around themselves, they realize the sheet is not clean enough. So they angerly get up, they try to wipe off their hands off trying to clean themselves from all the uncleanness that not just prevails on their body, but their mind too. They get up, they take off their clothes put it in the laundry, they take the mug that was on the desk to wash it, and scrub the desk while they are at it, as everything reminds them of uncleanness. They go to the shower, trying to scrub it all off, wear their new clothes and they enter their room again. Once again they feel like they are unclean again, starting from point zero. They run back to the bathroom, trying to wash up again, they look at the mirror, and what they are trying to ignore surfaces up, the guilt is there's even if they arnt what's dirty or the cause of it. That's why it's so ironic, why would you want to die when you are the clean and pure, and not the death of the dirty and unclean. "Why am I the one who lives it" living through the guilt and not the other person. And to me the video would end with the mirror shattering. This would be a great song and music video!!! 10/10 had to come back to add this😭
paper galleon
I did imagine it as a song by LP, yeah
I knew it wasn't just me smh
It definitely hits deeply
digital peak
Agreed!
dawn condor
gray geode
i like how intense this gets with the use of repetition and how the simplest of things show that like theres a scarier scenario behind it at the back of the person performing the task (i hope it makes sense). lovely work, i hope you’re okay
void thorn
i like how intense this gets with the use of repetition and how the simplest of ...
Thanksss
glacial temple
what happened to my favourite poem? @void thorn