A nova (of a sort)

[deep thistle]

These stars ive constructed—
strung from my sky
in scarce moments
of blessed, pitiful hope
These stars ive built—
they resemble the remnants of old stickers,
a nebula still partially stuck
on my bedroom ceiling.

These eyes I hold—
they feel so weary,
They watch—
as these stars
(such fanciful stars
dreamt up
from a fool's rosy reverie)
these stars ive built,
fall from overhead.
Ephemeral,
as fleeting
as the ones my sister once tore
from this ceiling.

I bear the mark of a kiss—
on my lips-
my joints
my collar and jaw bones
I bear the afterglow—
of a nova of a sort
dusting my cheeks
lingering across
the lids of my eyes.

[vernal sandal]

So, and I could absolutely be missing it, but I am assuming the stars are an allusion to certain hopes that the narrator holds onto in "scarce" or tough times. Hope can be constructed of dreams, but hope is the action and a dream is the outcome before the outcome. The nebula is the bundle of hope, like it was all strung together, to create one, bountiful form.

The stars falling are hope that has fallen.

The aftermath left, afterglow, resembles what is left of hope.

That's all I got. Let me know if I'm close or way off. That's just how I interpreted this. Overall, meaning aside, its a beautiful way to string together the lyrics of the universe to create a bigger meaning.

@deep thistle

[deep thistle]

genuinely spot on!!! this is exactly it

and thank you so much!
im glad it comes through :)

[vernal sandal]

good! i'm so glad. congratulations with this piece!

[iron inlet]

The use of em-dashes (—) are confusing, and used incorrectly, unless that's intentional? The grammar is also just generally poor, and the wording is confusing: Your poem lacks structure and basic grammatical rules (which doesn't feel intentional), and words such as "reverie" and "ephemeral" leave the reader guessing. They aren't exactly common words, and feel out of place. Some padding would help. Overall, this poem reads more like it was written with the intention to rake in attention and positive feedback than anything else.

[deep thistle]

thanks for the feedback! my grammar is generally poor, but the rest was intentional :)
and naw it definitely wasnt written for attention this is the first time ive shown it and its written about a very personal experience but appreciate this!

[deep thistle]

also em dashes are very versatile! theyre generally used for in between—like this—but they can pretty much do anything, they generally represent a pause when i use them (which is quite often)