#Breathe Me In -Rider

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subtle light
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Breathe me in, sweet girl.
Three weeks of these worlds burned to sunset ash in turn.
A word said, then escaped.
Unfurled and then uncaged.

Vessel of mine,
bear in mind the storm awaiting past these lines.
Breathe her in, little cynic.
Free these idyllic lyrics.

Bide your time,
make sure it's right before you let out these feelings locked up inside.
Breathe me in
and you won't breathe again.

The nights are long,
the skies are gone from where they used to belong.
Now it's just the star in you...
Why was it you I had to fall into?

I guess I'll never know
why my blood flows and my heart grows it's way out of my soul.
You're all I could ever need.
To keep you would be greed when you should be set free.

Mine but not in possession.
Obsession would be opression, this confession's in concession, devotion in expression.
Mine to love and to hold,
to raise up and to propose.

Breathe me in and don't exhale.
I'll memorise your lungs, every last detail, your tender eyes, your little size, right down to scale.
Your brush and my pen, my heart and your consent.
Breathe me in and you'll never breathe again.

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young yoke
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“Breathe me in and you won’t breathe again” sounds oddly threatening…

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You tryna kill your girl?!

subtle light
young yoke
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🤨

subtle light
young yoke
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I’m all seriousness, cute poem! As a certain someone said, great metaphors, nice rhymes and it really puts you in the place of the characters here

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It’s clear ya are an actual experienced writer here

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But PLEASE

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Let them BREATHE

upper grotto
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Mine but not in possession.
Obsession would be oppression, this confession's in concession, devotion in expression.
SHEESH
LET HIM COOK

subtle light
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alr so based on my understanding,
This poem is a powerful and unsettling exploration of intense, possessive love that borders on the dangerous and all-consuming

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gotta have a 95 out of 100