#This Red Smile of Mine

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stiff field
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Notes: 24 stanzas, with 11-10-11-10 AABB rhyme structure. Once my magnus opus

merry aspen
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I'm definitely one to appreciate long and impeccably structured poems. Although while reading it, I feel like the tension stagnated in the middle. Maybe more of an up-and-down to the mood throughout or else taking a more narrative-driven direction would have been good. I definitely would be interested to read a revision of this should you choose to write it!

stiff field
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i made this is late 2023, when i had only a few months of experience

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so its not up to my standards anymore