I used this in my English exam feedback would be appreciated

[native thorn]

Hi Neko, I'm Lamb nice to meet you 🤍 . Typography and structure is something to consider. At first glance, it seemed like a paragraph so starting a new line after each sentence would definelty make a difference.

Distant chattering filled the air; my anxiety started to flare.

oh I thought at least I’m not over there.

~~Yeah ~~ "Certainly", I’m an introvert, silent and oppressed.

That’s me happy as a lamb;as high as a kite.

Fight and flight hold on tight takes a grip on me.

I stopped taking a deep breath-
the smoky bitter air make me cough and choke, like someone holding me hostage; not letting me go.

Think of how you are as an introvert, or an event or place

[river wind]

Thank you would you mind also taking a glance over another piece of mine?

[native thorn]

sure, can you tag them

[river wind]

Oh can’t I do it here?

[native thorn]

oh okay, i will just search them up

oh wait

lol

this is good! I liked the way you ended and started with the peom. The title fits perfectly your peotry. did you intend you peom to be long?

[river wind]

Thanks uhh I don’t know I just kinda went with the flow would this be considered as long?

[native thorn]

yeah i would say so this is good

[river wind]

I really love the last line I was wondering through a city today and looking at all the people passing by and it made me think of this

[river wind]

Thank you so much this is my first real piece I guess

[native thorn]

i can see the creativity and inspiratio behind it now . I love that

[river wind]

Haha thank you I didn’t know if I should get it published or something

I wasn’t too sure

[native thorn]

confidence is key right😊

im glad i could help you

[river wind]

Definitely thank you