seaweed

[bronze vessel]

i move back and forth
and never leave.
i flow, i move like a feather
i don't move anywhere
i stay here.

my vision is like
a fog you will not see.
my vision is like
a sky that's never clear.

my ears are clogged,
i hear nothing.
i don't feel my ears,
i do not know what i hear.

i move deaf
i move blind,
i stay deaf
i stay blind.

no lights reach me,
i am far.
the dark caught me,
i was close.

i dance when moved,
i don't astray.

i am frozen.
i don't speak,
flow speaks for me.
it took the voice out
and lend the silence in.

i do not see the sun,
i do not shine.
i do not see the moon,
i do not gleam.

i do not see the sky,
i’m not clear.
i do not see people,
i’m not seen.

i do not wake up.
i do not sleep.

i dance,
i do not move.

[bronze vessel]

@night musk

[night musk]

Nice! A few small language notes: I would write: I don't go astray

And "lend the silence in" may be deliberate, the idiom is to let the silence in

The simple language is fine. Poems with it can be striking.

I like the focus on the senses and the movement. I am struggling to see seaweed without light though.

The long empty section in the middle is a bit too long for me but then I am not big on the layout part of poetry

[bronze vessel]

It's okay, and yes, I've felt a certain part of somewhere felt a little odd with thst line. I'll pick up what you said on reading line by line bc, I tend to not

[bronze vessel]

There is a depiction of a sea weed that is under water very far latching on somewhere

[bronze vessel]

For some strange reason. I did not think of putting that in but somehow let set up to be lend. I forgot that idiom was there

[bronze vessel]

For some strange reason. I did not think of putting that in but somehow let set up to be lend. I forgot that idiom was there

[bronze vessel]

Thanks for the suggestion ☺️