"I just want
A soul that leans into understand me
Not someone who fades into
The silence
I know it sounds stupid
I know it sounds crazy
But what can I do?
I lay down in bed
And all the quiet goes loud
Loneliness drips down from my spine
Like hot fire on bare skin
That's when it comes
Crashing down to me
I just want someone
Who sees the storm in my chest
And still chooses to stay"
#storm in my chest
thin nest
unkempt crow
Beautiful!
I liked the line 'loneliness drips down from my spine like hot fire on bare skin' most.
unique smelt
I really like this! the ideas are beautiful. i think the spacing feels a bit forced though in some places like
'not someone who fades into
the silence'
would sound smoother if you were to have it on one line.
i like your use of language features like rhetorical questions and symbolism, it really puts a beautiful description of the feelings you are trying to express here.