When admiration meets perfection!

[soft eagle]

Maybe end it with something like

“Nothing no one could quite capture
Reminiscing of a brighter future

From a distance he watches,
The girl he wanted finally got the note.

What could it be?”

Or something like that

Obviously not word for word but something along the lines

Just conclud ya story, and in the end leave it up to us, I personally suggest, if the guy confesses or not or if she accepts or not

Or maybe go in more deep detail of his obsession too

That could help

But so far I like ya poem!

[topaz ravine]

Maybe end it with
He hopes that one day she will be with me
Her love is only thing he needs
Best thing in the world
May their love unite together how fire ignites with light and last long as the sun

[wanton eagle]

wowww short but good I like how you started it it's cute too and it's pretty good for a beginner and first poem you should try and explore different types and think deeper and try new things too

[deep warren]

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[wanton eagle]

also I read ur bio and I'm the extrovert version of u (enfp-a) hiii nice to meet youuu

[broken karma]

Thank you so much for your feedback. These are great plots to add 🩷

[broken karma]

Hi there! Thank you for your feedback, originally, the start of my poems written were always centered around one concept. so this is the first one I've done so far outside of it. What genre do you think I can explore?

[past tundra]

Wonderful! @broken karma has just progressed to level 2!

[broken karma]

Nice to meet you as well 🤍 I love people that are so energetic and bubbly. I hope to talk to you more often!

[broken karma]

Omgosh this is so good. I'll definitely add it on, and tweak it a little bit. Thank you so much this was very helpful 🤍

[topaz ravine]

Also can u take look at my poetry
The name is "veloria"
Pretty words ugly feelings its posted u can search for it

[broken karma]

Ofcourse 🤍

[wanton eagle]

anything hehe (I was tryna sound wise and um give good feedback) also like you can try new poem prompts ones that is not ur style and out of your comfort zone yk like to explore smth new (how am I doing 😭)

[wanton eagle]

same goes to youuu 💗 I love people that are like.. you haha anyways I'm looking forward to reading more of your poemsss

[broken karma]

Hahah I understand now! You doing good girl I gott you're point 🤍

[wanton eagle]

welcomesss and thank you haha 🩵

[deep warren]

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[broken karma]

I made a few edits and changes to my poem. Let me know what you think?

[sullen gyro]

“I’ve loved you for the longest time”..

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[deep lagoon]

STRAIGHT

PEAK

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[broken karma]

Thank you!

[broken karma]

Thank you 😊🙏🏾

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