#Purposeless Parcel

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fluid pollen
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@azure monolith @rose ocean

warm urchin
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This is a very interesting poem! love the spiral into indifference of his job later on in the stanzas

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Love how he also speaks about the fact that this wasn't his destiny but the benefits of this job are enough to make him stay (24/7 payday, the bypassed levies)

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i also love that juxtaposition where he's like "the package is heavy but im feeling light"

dense tinsel
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wow! You are a skillful poet

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The lines are amazing because they scan brilliantly

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in romantic couplets and hexameters, but the prose poetry form would make it so that the reader is not aware of the consummate skill in the poet's verses,

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instead, the reader is forced to confront the sanity of the poet, and this their own

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I absolutely ADORE prose poetry and this is an awesome example of it

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prose poetry often has a lot in common with free verse. Instead of seeing the subject as a visionary, he is giving service, falling victim to his drudgery, facing death like we all do

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sorry I may have misunderstood the subject

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I reallly have nothing to say bad about the poem. I think its a sparkling example of prose poetry, which is like everything I aspire to, but havn't managed to get right!

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I love it~

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Poems can be short, and the best thing is you are the only one who knows what it should look like, where the pauses are, where the verses start and end, where the lines would have enjambed, but not having the lines enjambed is what gives the poem its power. What I mean to say is you are the only one who knows when your poem is perfect and done. I think this is an awesome little poem that showcases the poet's skill and gives just enough so that as a reader, I was begging for more. Great work! Read ya later

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I mean I wish I could give some advice on what to work on, but I write verse, and I have been trying to write prose poetry for the longest time, and not being able to do it successfully, and never quite like this poem, which is the kind of poem as a fan of prose poetry I was looking for. I wish I wrote poetry like this! Maybe I just make my ones way too long

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What instantly drew me to the poem was I was like blown away by the skills of the poet who is not like showing off. I wasn't expecting it. Great work!

earnest foxBOT
warm urchin
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you need to review poems for a living because this breakdown is incredible!

dense tinsel
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my dream job

warm urchin
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pursue it please.. you do more work than my literature teacher 😭

fluid pollen
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Just posted a collection of my previous works in case either of you wanna see that

warm urchin
tender badger
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Already this GoTTA be a rap

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It’s FIRE

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Spitting many bars

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And, is this about quitting a delivery service? I’m very confused on that but I haven’t finished reading yet so work with me here

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I thought it was depicting a road trip at first

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OHHHHHh I see what it is

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From this alone this almost symbolizes, which sure could include your job, but you carrying that heavy burden and dealing with it alone just to think

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“Wait, I ain’t gotta deal with it”

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And THROW those away

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Sure, some will stick but, you can handle it

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I’m still reading but am I close?

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That’s how I interpret it

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I think I got it from the title and reading it

fluid pollen
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I wanted it the poem to represent a sense of letting go of the past

tender badger
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The EPIPHANY I had when it was pretty much confirmed to me

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spice echoBOT
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*The EPIPHANY

I had when it was pretty

much confirmed to me*

- themulberryfruit
tender badger
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Like slap on the face

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EY

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Now THATS POETRY

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Actually why is that one good I’ll save that hold up

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But no like

tender badger
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It took me a second but the symbolism, and that ENERGY man

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I love it, and it got me thinking till it all just reveals I’m the end

“I don’t need to worry, let someone else take on that delivery ride”

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Like DUDE 😭

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I’m sorry just aaaa

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I love poems like these

fluid pollen
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Thank you for the support.

fluid pollen
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@rapid mauve

fluid pollen
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@olive socket