to my lover

[warped dagger]

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[leaden dirge]

This was really adorable. I enjoyed it a lot! You might have a typo in the second verse, 3rd line.
In each stupid fight I'd go limb just because you smiled
should it be,
*In each stupid fight I'd go limp just because you smiled * ?

[tight ice]

yeshhh thank youuu and so very gladdd

@shadow plover

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@true zealot

[true zealot]

It's amazing

:D

Great job nobo

[tight ice]

thank youu and he's finally alive you haven't been here in awhile

(meaning ima tag u in other poems too)

[true zealot]

Lmao

[vapid trench]

Wonderful! @true zealot has just progressed to level 16!

[shadow plover]

I love this one, very admirable

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@thorny grove

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@shadow kindle

@maiden wolf

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@pearl heath

@valid ingot

@safe pasture

[sacred reef]

this is great! nobody is cooking ngl 3 poems in a day or wht?

[thorny grove]

Hahaaha
Soo cuteee i love itt

[tight ice]

thank you so muchhh

[tight ice]

I'm gladdd

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@subtle kiln

@ornate vapor

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@soft quail

[slim plover]

beautiful

[tight ice]

thanksss

@rigid crown

[ornate vapor]

Awww its really cutee and adorableeee 😭😭😭 i lovedd itt ❤️❤️❤️

GOOD WORK!!!!

[tight ice]

thank youuuu

[valid ingot]

a very warm and sweet piece
loved those small goofy moments that you've captured and light humour lines fitting well

my suggestions:
some lines feel longer or chunky which i think you can trim or rephrase for better flow like Getting lost in your eyes, burning food while we cook.
and maintain consistency in verb forms: Cookings -> cooking and fightings -> either fights or fighting

[tight ice]

ooo thank you and yesh I js wrote cookings bc it rhymes hehe

[rigid crown]

it's so cute!!! you can really utilize rhyming schemes well:))

whoever u wrote this for is insanely lucky

[tight ice]

haha thank youuu and he isss

[vocal shuttle]

I just read it, very sweet and its beautifully written!

[tight ice]

thank youuu

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@winter sand

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@safe pasture

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@maiden wolf

@oak compass

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@olive ridge

[olive ridge]

this is so cheesy and romantic in a positive way! really highlights the concept of young love and how in the end attraction trumps everything at a young age

[tight ice]

thank youuu

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@formal hare

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@lethal mantle

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@shadow kindle

[lethal mantle]

"My cheeks blush but I'd just shrug" THE FAKE NONCHALANCE LMAOOAOA. i also like the whole poems' rhythm, its giving heartbeats cuz of the bouncy, conversational flowkinda mirrors the giddy spinning-in-circles feeling of new love lol. "Wow I’m falling hard for you." the 'wow' sells it LOL, love as a sudden n dumb realization. "You're my forever goofy beau." Goofy is the best romantic adjective😭 "In your arms I'm always snug" the rhyme is cute!!

[tight ice]

haha thank youu fr and so very happy you enjoyed reading ittt 💗

[tight ice]

@cedar relic

[cedar relic]

i think the rhymes were nicely done, but it caused a lot of the lines to feel forced.
i didn't really feel that it was from the heart, which is what's supposed to make poetry feel romantic. if it doesnt seem to be from the bottom of your heart, then it's nothing but words

the poem says a lot about what you guys do, but there never seems to be a reflection of it

aka how does it make you feel? how do you react to it?

you set the stage and your actors are playing, but i personally don't feel any chemistry from it

that said, i do think this poem has lots of potential, and if you just changed the perspective a bit (going from showing what happens in the relationship to showing how it makes you feel) you would have poem that seems to come straight from the heart more

i do see some instances/ lines where you do this, but i do suggest heavier emphasis to improve the poem

but still, great job on the poem, it was a wonderful read!

[tight ice]

ahhhh I love the long feedback will keep that in mind next time thank you so muchh I really appreciate ittt 💗

[cedar relic]

mhm, no problem!!

[safe fractal]

Ahhh , really sweet ,
I loved it sm , the lines literally took me on a ride to the story ,
It's relatable and expressing ....

[tight ice]

thank you so muchhh

[tawny sorrel]

I love how personal yet universal this feels >.<

[tight ice]

thank youuu 💗

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@stiff shale

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@molten patrol

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@mortal carbon

[tight ice]

@normal vortex ima be tagging u as a welcome back gift 🙂

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@late basin

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@hollow snow

sorry for tagging again.. feedback?

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@ancient heart

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@fickle surge

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@opaque trout

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@forest helm

[forest helm]

crying because I want this love

[tight ice]

awhh same here gurl same 🤧

can I tag u in some other poems..?

||when I mean some I mean many||

[forest helm]

Might as well, though I would prefer if you only tag me in the positive ones 💕

[tight ice]

I rarely write negative ones dw hehe and thank youu also you're really sweet

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@remote aurora

[forest helm]

thank you same to you!

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@meager thistle

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@mossy forum

@lime forge

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@steel copper

[steel copper]

YESSS ITS SOO GOOD!!!!!!!

[tight ice]

thank you so muchh