Faceless windows:

[unkempt storm]

142. "
     I wake up it's a sad day,
     I wake up it's a day,
     I see a window all alone,
     I am alone.
     With a man inside,
     I look at a window with a man inside,
     So I draw a smile on the window.
     he has the kindest smile, from the window."

@brazen rose@obtuse roost @normal mortar @mental notch@low sparrow@keen dawn

[normal mortar]

love how you make that distinction that we're all connected despite not knowing each other

[unkempt storm]

Most definitely and also there's actually a special way to read this poem if u can figure out what that way is

[normal mortar]

wait, i just realized this poem is 8 lines long and every couplet, the 2nd line repeats the 1st but more clearer

[unkempt storm]

Ur on to something 😭 bout to out all my details 😭

[normal mortar]

the pronouns really define the poem because it's the thing that makes every action in this poem personal

[unkempt storm]

I do admit this poem has quite a few detail, prolly the second most out of all my poems, the only one I can think of with more is, your that same boy. But that's cus that's my fav poem cus while most are bases on my older self that ones based more on what I can remember of my childhood

[normal mortar]

I wake up. HE has the kindest smile. I draw a smile. I am alone

[oblique lynx]

*I wake up. HE has

the kindest smile. I draw a

smile. I am alone*

- ziondeluxe

[unkempt storm]

Oh most definitely, I should try rereading it but read it as every other line

[normal mortar]

ohhhh i see it now

its like you simplified it

also, if i may ask, what do the numbers at the start of each poem mean?

[unkempt storm]

Ohh ya I get the question alot, that's just the order that I write em in my notes. But ion always write with order I sometimes write the idea but write the poem itself when I feel inspired ✨️

[normal mortar]

i just have a notebook where i just write my stuff in

when im ready to write, i just crack it open and go

[unkempt storm]

Thats cool asf 😭 I Sadly have bad handwriting and spelling

[normal mortar]

i just like writing poems lol, it feels soulless writing it on a phone

like i have a physical copy with lines i could've wrote, my handwriting, my slashes of lines i omitted etc

[unkempt storm]

Thats fair I first started out like that when I was really little, but I kinda stopped writing for a long time and started again and now I only do it on phone

[unkempt storm]

Fair 😭

[normal mortar]

hopefully i continue to construct my poems on paper💔

[unkempt storm]

I hope i can get better hand writing 😭 or find my old poetry book my best stuff was on there from when I was lil

[normal mortar]

i hope u do twin🤞🏿 memory lane is the best place to go sometimes but don't stay there too long, u got a future to live for 💪🏿

[unkempt storm]

😭 u finna make me write, "your still that same boy, pt 2" with how u talk about the past

[unkempt storm]

Also I might join the vc poetry reading when I get off the train, what poem u think I should share?

[normal mortar]

i think you should share is "The people in chairs". it could create some good discussions