How about "coiled calm on its poisoned pillow
Tongue, a thread of silver lies
Its eyes a glow of two cold and endless skies"
"It hissed 'She hides a darker hue' 'She speaks and smiles, but none of it is true'
The boy, with heart "too smart to sway"(not sure if you were saying his heart was beating so it couldn't sway?)
Nodded slow and turned away
"For his love, she stood with open hands,"
Not sure who/what you are referring to as being "a barefoot soul on shifting sands"
#Venom Over Vows
crystal ivy
(This is a really good poem/story, these are small things you don't have to change if you don't want to)
shut juniper
(This is a really good poem/story, these are small things you don't have to chan...
Thank you I really appreciate the feedback!
fading blaze
Good 👍🏿💯
It tells a tragic fable of love destroyed by doubt and manipulation. A boy is deceived by a serpent’s lies about his lover’s honesty. Blinded by suspicion, he turns against her, and their love dies not from betrayal, but from lost trust. It’s a cautionary tale about how easily truth can be drowned by poison disguised as wisdom.
shut juniper
It tells a tragic fable of love destroyed by doubt and manipulation. A boy is de...
exactly some poeple have to understand that you cant always belive whats on the internt or what people tell you becaseu they could be lying to you just to break you or your partner up or just to hurt you in genrel
fading blaze
Yes is this your first poem?
@shut juniper
shut juniper
no this is not my first poem i have others @fading blaze
fading blaze
Okay I don't know if I can also read them I really love this
slate impBOT
fading blaze
Have you published any
@shut juniper
shut juniper
i have published them but it was awhile ago, i could dm you and share them with you if youd like? @fading blaze
fading blaze
Okay
Which platform do you upload your book 📚📖