i carry silence

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WHAAA TY BEST FEEDBACK GOTTEN YAAAYYY GLAD YOU FELT IT 💐

[normal summit]

I love to cry
I love to flee
Id run from these seas
That cradle nightmares and trauma

Lovely

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thank you

[worthy galleon]

this ones rlly nice i feel the emotion u put into it (idk if its bcs i relate or bcs u js genuinley wrote it rlly well) i especially like the ending tho, i love how it shifts focus from the speaker to the 'you' person and highlights their shared silence

[dusk frigate]

this poem is next level

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"I carry silence like pain— Like it's my only friend."

Dammnnnnnn just the starting line hits harder!!!!🥹💗💗💗💗💗

This poem is so powerful!! And brutually honest at the last🥹💗💗 I LOVE IT! Felt like you took us on a whole journey!!! I LOVE IT

"You are swallowing secrets
No one ever knew." HITS SO HARD???!

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awhhh thank you so muchhh so glad yall liked it

@trim tundra since u learned poetry u are now my teacher so give some feedbackz

[trim tundra]

Steady on there, I didn't actually agree to teach you :p but I'll give you some feedback when I can 🙂

[solemn gorge]

hehe okey thanks also can i tag u in some of my other poems

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[pine stone]

This one is really good

"You’re swallowing secrets
No one ever knew."

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AWHHH MOI READIN LE WAIT A SEC LE

Okize á few thoughtz

Moi like da theme

Moi like the uneven story le

But Id say da jump from the 2nd stanza to 3rd was too sudden mebz?

Le then da the poem became bout "you"

When the titlez "I carry silence" le

MOI LIKEZ DAT

But I think the halfway thought it kinda lost itz point?

Le unless "you" is "I" le

BUT LE ITZA GREATZ POEM LE

Moi like da 3rd para le

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ouhh- thanks

yeah it shifted

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AWWWWHHHHH YEAAAYYYYYYYY

[solemn gorge]

hehe yesh appreciate the feedback

[vernal lichen]

Pretty good but I agree with notter The shift was a bit quick but overall still good!

[solemn gorge]

thx

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Yess

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tell me wot u think of de poemsss (read whenever you cannn)

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OMG I LOVE THAT ONEEE

[manic warren]

silence holds with cold hands and lets you cry\

but sadness shouldn't be a shame

it shouldn't feel so heavy. so cold

its not your faut\

the big other, an false image of society that reflects its depraved desires, wants secretly to be fooled

[solemn gorge]

you said it so beautifully..

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nooo

here look into my soul if u wish

you have been warned

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I mean it really haha you sounded so poeticcc

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i do??

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yeshhh

u dooo

I loves your feedback

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wait ur following me???

omg

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thank u im honored

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of course your feedback convinced me to

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awh welcomesss

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❤️

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thxx

hey u wanna see my new stuff

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yes pleasee

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