#Pool Sinker Through the Blue

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fallow python
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A little black pool-sinker
Through the blue,
Before touchdown–
And the blue becomes white.
A white tablecloth pulled taut
Over the sky like skin

Or a plastic bag over a head–
Suffocating with Hiroshima ash
Before the sky burns down.

The pool sinker seemed brilliant–
Clutched in a child’s fat hand,
But fists close
And hands throw–
While water ripples,
The water will forget.

timid wedge
fair vapor
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I love the way you described it!

Stanza 1: It feels like the blue is changing hues of colors like, from the black pool-sinker, it transforms the colors over the sky!

Suffocating with Hiroshima ash? It feels like a flame that makes the sky burn down by how I read it! I love the way you did it tho:)

Last stanza: It feels like a pool sinker is an object? since its clutched in a child's hand if I'm right? I do love the last lines "While water ripples, The water will forget" I picture it as the water moves when it triggers like a quiver effect?

Although, I love the way you did the poem and you did well @fallow python 🙂 You did a good job:D

fallow python
fallow python
# fair vapor I love the way you described it! Stanza 1: It feels like the blue is changing h...

Thank you for the feedback, the last stanza is more of a metaphor about human nature and the nature of aggression (a child because the bomb is described as a pool toy and also the kind of disregard that some global powers can have for the lives they affect) and also "the water forgets" is kind of like how history repeats itself when we allow ourselves to forget things like WW2 and the Cold War

timid wedge
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But a nuclear war is unlikely if the countries don’t go mad

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*But a nuclear

war is unlikely if the

countries don’t go mad*

- miststurmass
fallow python
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Never can tell with global superpowers though

timid wedge
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Because it will raise the chance of MAD mutual assured destruction

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*Because it will raise

the chance of MAD mutual

assured destruction*

- miststurmass
fair vapor
fallow python
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damn, two haikubots in a row, that's wild

timid wedge
fallow python
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I swear it always does it at the worst time

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like in the middle of an important message or something else like that

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when i'm giving feedback or something

timid wedge
timid wedge
fallow python
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i was talking about haikubot

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but getting vaporized also doesn't sound great

fallow python
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*Yeah I'm not about

to have all my years of stress

be wasted like that*

- kermitdefrog0536_32189
fallow python
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DAMN YOU HAIKUBOT

timid wedge
fallow python
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me too

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chat, I'm starting to think war is bad

timid wedge
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Of course it is bad

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It is 💩

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The worst thing can happen in this era is war

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Because of nukes

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If we had wars like 3 centuries ago it wouldn’t be as scary

fallow python
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but technology has come so far

timid wedge
fallow python
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weapons of mass destruction, why are they made at all?

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Like that's just ensuring a MAD situation

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get rid of them

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I guess not every power would agree to simultaneously get rid of them all

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they'd all want to keep a few

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boo 👎

fallow python
timid wedge
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Every weapon has a weakness

fallow python
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well...

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once a nuke has been launched, what are you gonna do?

timid wedge
fallow python
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I guess

timid wedge
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But i may get hit by the radiotion

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But let’s say my country gets hit by nukes

fallow python
timid wedge
fallow python
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Yeah

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or build a bunker

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stock up

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damn, it's 1 AM, I need sleep

timid wedge
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At least 10 months of preparation is needed