#Let's meet above.

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ionic osprey
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***In the quiet coves, and the violent storms;
There came a breeze, filled with warmth.
I thought she was a wind, meant to leave—
But she stayed… maybe it was destiny’s plea.

She’s the spark in my endless night,
When I thought I was lost, she became my light.
Told me my fading ember still had fight,
Refused to watch me disappear into the night.

My moon, my compass in the hollow skies,
The fragile hope that tomorrow might rise.
I held the sun—I held her close to my chest,
But just when it all felt real, felt right—
Fate pulled the plug, and killed the light.
Our hearts—Once unshakeable, now shakes with doubt;
Nothing the same at all, it feels so odd now,
The tune we had, nobody could break,
Now it doesn't even makes a noise to say we'd stay.

I tried, not once not twice, but many times when I didn't even thought twice.***
"Hi, are you okay?" ***Message ignored,
On read,
No replies,
Days went by,
Seasons changed, time skipped by,
Though I have her face carved in my mind,

I still remember how it felt,
When I saw her with somebody else,
The day—cold, I was trying to find a ray of hope,
Waiting for the withered roses to bloom once more,
But deep down—inside I know it's out of reach,
A fake lie, just to keep myself alive,
From keeping me wandering astray without life.***

"Hey wait!" I shouted,
"Please don't leave me behind."
***I plead, I begged, I cried but—
It all went
up in flames,
unanswered,
unheard.

I ran behind her,
Though she held her man close,
Was I a toy all along?
Meant to be thrown.
The only person I had, left me here for the dead...***

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***Despair, running in my veins,
A friend—uninvited, he stayed,
Grief—my new mate, I can't see him,
But I feel him running through my blood all the time.

Memories of her keeping me alive,
With a little bit of whispers from the undying,
Nothing but a few souvenirs I savor,
After all they are the last memories of her.

Broken I stood as she left,
Crumbled, piece by piece 'til there was nothing left,
A heart, filled with hollowness I bear,
A soul, hurt more than it deserved.

Reminiscing the past—the promises undone,
The hands were touched but left unhold,
The stories that were left untold,
The ring—got left behind, nobody wore.

The texts—I sent, seen but never heard,
Was always wishing for the best for her,
Though she left me alone, left me to the silence that haunts me 'til this day,
Ashes and a burning heart in pain,
I doubt if I know what's good and what's wrong,
Does every lover feels this way?

I gave everything I could,
I held the sun, but had to kiss the night,
Loved her with all I had, gave her 'til I was hollow inside,
Gave her, all I had, but yet—
I failed.

Is this the cost of being in-love with a rose?
My hands bleed the hue of crimson hoard.
Is this the cost falling so deep?
That now I'm sinking in an ocean of bleach.***

**"Sorry..." *To the ones I once sought to mourn,
I guess I'll be going to the afterlife first...

Sorry mom, sorry dad...
Sorry my love, sorry my friends...

I couldn't be happy in life,
Death feels way better than suffocating everyday from inside.

Let's all meet above, in the paradise.

Jumps***

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@ionic osprey has sent a notification! - @glad bramble @static relic @broken shuttle @abstract oyster @tepid meadow @drowsy plinth @steel oar @lethal linden

ionic osprey
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@woven raft

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Yes I'm lazy to make a pdf

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:3

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Special thanks to @sinful raven and @broken shuttle for helping me out

lethal linden
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"Despair, running in my veins,
A friend—uninvited, he stayed,
Grief—my new mate, I can't see him,
But I feel him running through my blood all the time."

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DAMN THE RAW EMOTIONS YOU POUR OUT IN YOUR WORKS

ionic osprey
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:))))

ionic osprey
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xd

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I wonder if I can do better than this

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gotta test

ionic osprey
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@steel oar @lethal tendon

lethal tendon
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i'm yapping in gc rn

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will read in a while

ionic osprey
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Alrr

lethal tendon
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OH MY LAWWRDDD

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THIS ONE IS SO BEAUTIFULLLLLLLLLL

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FKYUSGFBKERUFHUK

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i love it so much fr

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fr fr frf

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i'm saving it

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the last line is literally chef's kisss

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frickkkkk i love it so muchhh

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The texts—I sent, seen but never heard,
Was always wishing for the best for her,
Though she left me alone, left me to the silence that haunts me 'til this day,

just wanted to ask if the 2nd line is correct..i dont know it doesn't sound right to me..the WAS used here..is it for texts or you.. just a humble opinion ..if it is for texts then it would be better to change it to WERE .. to avoid grammatical complications ..and the repetition of FOR doesn't sound that satisfying...so just my opinion..i think it will flow better like this... WERE ALWAYS WISHING THE BEST FOR HER. if the was is for you then its correct

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you dont have to change it if you dont want to

ionic osprey
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I was

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Always wishing

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Not texts 😭

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The first line says that she did read the messages but never understood them

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And I wished her the best though she left me to the silence that's too much for me to handle

broken shuttle
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Finally found it😭

broken shuttle
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spiraling heartbreak into despair

ionic osprey
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yessir

glad bramble
ionic osprey
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Tyyy

woven raft
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Fire

ionic osprey
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@limber flax

limber flax
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Alright:D Ima read^^

ionic osprey
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:)

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Tyyy

limber flax
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I read the first part! Its amazing! The emotion its there by how you expressed it in those lines!

First stanza: Brillant way to start it like the imagery is coming on in my perspective^^ It felt like it was a violent rains as of the storms! Was it a depressing night for the boy? or the Rise of it?

Second stanza: The rhyme is perfect there! It looked like the boy was in the darkness and the girl was his light throughout the night!

Third stanza: I love the way you expressed it! The way you described her and how you felt! "My moon, my compass in the hollow skies" "Fate pulled the plug, and killed the light." Those lines are amazing and It's like when you have so much light from a plug filling it up and once its pulled it all goes out and all its left its darkness with no glows! I feel like it explains the feelings of the girl and boy relationship or friendship that fell apart or started too!

The texting part to tell the emotions like a perspective of someone being ignored all over again and it hurts the boy's heart when it is shattered!

A memory of how he remember how he felt? The stanzas are good, I love it and his POV of what he saw when she was with someone else. Trying to fake his smile and his real emotions knowing deep down he was hurt. Begging for the girl to not leave him alone! and Now he's thinking like was he a toy? or a puppet that didnt even exist to her, the only person he had broke him and left him!

I love the first part of it, The description is there! Ima read the second part

ionic osprey
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Tyyy :3

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I took help from Keyari and Writer on the first 3 stanzas since I'm not good with positive poems but from 4th onwards

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It's just me

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My next poem won't really be rhyming much

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Since it's a story type of poem

limber flax
# ionic osprey ***Despair, running in my veins, A friend—uninvited, he stayed, Grief—my new mat...

First stanza: It feels like his tears are his mate from my POV of his character! "Grief-my new mate, I can't see him" His tears are his mate but he cant see it but he's feeling it?:0

Second: I can tell he's thinking about her which makes him feel worse! He feels heartbroken and the memories keeping him alive are the last ones of her before she left him:(

Third: From what I imagined! He looked at her broken and watching her leave him with tears in his eyes as he was tore down so much that these stanzas express it along with 3-6 of the stanzas! Its like a memory lane of him remembering and wondering what he did wrong for her to leave which was affecting him alot! How he felt! What he thought! What came on! Just explains there:)

"Does every lover feels this way?" Good question for the type of poem like this from the expression and thoughts it shows!

The boy did everything he could for the girl he loved the most but yet he feels like he failed her and himself aswell from what I read!

"Is this the cost of being in-love with a rose?"
I love the way you described it after answering the question like How it feels or what pain what it was like, the colors of it!

The part when I think he is trying to commit sucide in the last messages! Its very expressive of it and how he feels about Death! Hes going straight to heaven after everything he experienced!

I love the way this poem is for both parts! Telling a story of a boy who loved a girl but she left him and it left the boy heartbroken as it kept him with memories that he couldn't stand as he was tore apart from it of the love he had from her!

You did a good job @ionic osprey 🙂

limber flax
crude creekBOT
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*Well you all did a

good job! and Help is what makes

us improve! and yes:)*

limber flax
ionic osprey
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🫡

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You can read A puppet (one of my best poems) and Be mine (it's like this)

ionic osprey
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@rose quail

ionic osprey
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@brisk rover

steel oar
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"But just when it all felt real, felt right— Fate pulled the plug, and killed the light."

Nahhhh just this line carries so much emotions alone🥹💗💗💗

"Despair, running in my veins,
A friend —uninvited, he stayed,
Grief—my new mate, I can't see him,
But I feel him running through .y blood all the time."

THIS IS MY FAV STANZA!!!SobbinTheLanaDelReyOut 💗💗 Zore how do you write such a good lines overflowing with emotions, simple yet complex🥹💗

ionic osprey
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Flow

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xD

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Also the fate line was pulled off by writer, he helped me in that

steel oar
drowsy plinth
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Bro dang this was deep

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I keep saying I am not into sad poems but I think it's the feeling rather than the art because I mean this hit deep bro

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Sorry for the late response but this was amazing

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The end was crazy

drowsy plinth
ionic osprey
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It'll take a while tho

drowsy plinth
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alr lol

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take ur time

ionic osprey
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🫡

tepid meadow
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Although I'm not a regular reader of romantic literature, all the experiences I've had, to some degree, with poems that are linked to this drive for life through the other have always been positive.

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So I feel that the qualities that I associate with this type of writing have not left anything to be desired; between sidereal descriptions, composed with minimalist wit in front of the reader's imagination.

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You were able to make this idyllic and vital love become, between the lines, a different kind of affection; one that is no longer violent, but only contemplative, funereal and truly, truly remarkable.

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It's amazing how the last verses reveal the desire of so many others; the idea of at least being appreciated for what you've done for others, rather than being torn apart by the dread of immediate oblivion.

ionic osprey
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TYSM MARCO!!!! :DDDD
I really appreciate it!

ionic osprey
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@rough pasture

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@dense echo

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It's kinda big but eh

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@shadow marsh

shadow marsh
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It's beautiful

tiny saffronBOT
ionic osprey
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After reading this would u guys mind giving me a feedback?

ionic osprey
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Thanks

shadow marsh
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I'm pretty mucho a beginner too

ionic osprey
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Doesn't matter

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Knowing about someone's perspective is what I'm looking forward to

dense echo
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This is GORGEOUSLY TRAGICCCCCCC. how you describe falling out of love mmph..

ionic osprey
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┐⁠(⁠ ⁠∵⁠ ⁠)⁠┌

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I just went with the flow

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I'm now writing a book

rough pasture
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I held the sun but had to kiss the night 🥹 omg this is peak

dense echo
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and i love the nature metaphors

ionic osprey
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So won't be posting for a while

rough pasture
ionic osprey
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The fact that he had the girl he loved but yet

dense echo
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"My moon, my compass in the hollow skies,
The fragile hope that tomorrow might rise." you need a pulitzer NOW

ionic osprey
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What's a pulitzer 😭

rough pasture
# ionic osprey :D

Does this line mean that u had her love as ur sun but were forced to kiss the night meaning u lost said love, forcing u into the darkness without her light?

ionic osprey
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Yes

shadow marsh
rough pasture
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Bro actually cooked ngl 😭 my writing don't even touch tis

ionic osprey
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Even though I had her, yet we couldn't be together, though I had the light but yet I had to embrace the dark

crude creekBOT
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*Bro actually

cooked ngl 😭 my writing

don't even touch tis*

ionic osprey
dense echo
tiny saffronBOT
rough pasture
ionic osprey
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You guys should read Kai's poems

rough pasture
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I have a few

ionic osprey
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He's way above me in poems

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😭

rough pasture
ionic osprey
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Ngl I'm jealous of his skills

dense echo
rough pasture
dense echo
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let me get wordy, he's quintessential

shadow marsh
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I think is beautiful that there's skillful poets, poets better than me

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That means that there's not limit

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That beauty is endless

ionic osprey
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Ngl I write not to overcome but write what I feel

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Or one might be feeling

shadow marsh
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And that is enough for everyone

ionic osprey
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I only have 1 poem about non living substance,

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Poetry's bout following your heart

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Not brain :)

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-# Ngl I don't have a brain either way

rough pasture
dense echo
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i write to sharpen my skills, test my vocabulary and how well im able to interpret an emotion

ionic osprey
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:O

shadow marsh
ionic osprey
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I interpret my emotions

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Or someone's emotions

shadow marsh
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As a metaphor

ionic osprey
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Damn

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Mind pinging me?

shadow marsh
rough pasture
# ionic osprey Or one might be feeling

Ngl I've been wanting to write a poem about a specific emotion of mine but I can't find the name for it and I've yet to meet someone who may know what it's called

tiny saffronBOT
ionic osprey
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Like some hints of how it feels like

rough pasture
rough pasture
# ionic osprey Like some hints of how it feels like

One day I was laying down with my eyes closed and I finally got closer to understanding this emotion. It's like beam of sunlight caressing your cracked eyelids as your eyes see through what your eyelids try to block, to something more than nostalgic, not happy not sad but more, kinda like stoicism

shadow marsh
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I write everything I want to say but can't

rough pasture
ionic osprey
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*realisation

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But of what?

rough pasture
rough pasture
shadow marsh
ionic osprey
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It's most likely enlightenment

rough pasture
tepid meadow
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GODDAMN THIS IS FIRE

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u cooked

ionic osprey
rough pasture
ionic osprey
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Try to find out about philosophy and stuff

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Might help you a bit

tepid meadow
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yall got some philosopher talk going rn stop i need to turn my brain off for the weekend 💔😔

rough pasture
tepid meadow
ionic osprey
tepid meadow
rough pasture
tepid meadow
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similar times

ionic osprey
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:D

tepid meadow
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u talented

ionic osprey
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Nah

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Just wrote what I felt like

dense echo
tepid meadow
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nah the fact u can express urself like this is fire

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not everybody can

tepid meadow
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not after ye went crazy

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💔

dense echo
tepid meadow
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no more scrolling stop it

ionic osprey
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😭

tepid meadow
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lock in sir

tepid meadow
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mb

ionic osprey
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Yea

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Lmao

tepid meadow
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LMAO

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do you like music

ionic osprey
tepid meadow
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fire

ionic osprey
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Had it written on bio a while ago

tepid meadow
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u like hip hop?

ionic osprey
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Not really

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I like sad songs mostly

tepid meadow
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ohh i see

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whos ur favorite artist

ionic osprey
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Hmm

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Let me think

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HMMM

tepid meadow
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ive never heard of HMMM

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are they good

ionic osprey
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layto and Conscience and Mitchel dae

ionic osprey
tepid meadow
ionic osprey
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:0

tepid meadow
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YEAH LOLL

ionic osprey
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Ngl I started poetry so I could express myself

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Working really well

tepid meadow
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same actually

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got more works i could read in dms?

ionic osprey
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Mostly all of my poems are heee

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*here

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But I'm working on a book

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And need some feedbacks

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For it

rough pasture
tepid meadow
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do tell

ionic osprey
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Dms

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😭