#O Moon, Great Moon (remade)

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O moon, great moon,
So beautiful up there in the dark dreamy sky.
That white mascara of yours flares its wings in the sparkling void;
A celestial indication of comfort and of concern.

O moon, great moon,
How luminous you are!
Yet, in spite of your alluring light,
I need my own to walk my path.

O moon, why moon,
Must you leave when then fine hour arrives?
When I am at ease by your fine presence?
Yet, for the sake of my wounds in this hardened heart,
I feel better eased by your absence.
The sun now commands my memory.

O moon, how moon,
Do you manage to capture my affection?
When only half an eye peeks from its eyelids
And glimpses at your aurora?
You're but a daily sight—
Albeit, never could you rust my binoculars.

O moon, speak, moon.
When did the Yule days expire?
Reaching you was my greatest fantasy.
I promised you four days of patience.
Only four months have passed, and now we are distant.
And when I asked you for your hand, you remained resistant.

O moon, dear moon,
The roads are emptied,
Life comes to a pause,
My heart's beat is night's sole symphony;
How dare you be accompanied by the stars!
I thought the universe gifted us the planet for our own.
Yet you jest at it with your fellow jesters up there.

Still, I make room for us both despite our distance.
The galaxy's offers are limitless compared to mine.
Your image will forever orbit my mind,
While my existence will be eaten by the nebula.

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@main igloo
Here's my first poem again but rewritten 😂😂

I would really appreciate it if you had a look at it

main igloo
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cinder sigil
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This is beautiful! The way your words flow with such ease and talent is something any poet dreams of achieving! Really well done!

restive dawn
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this is great

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sinful rivetBOT
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@quasi fox
Here it is!

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Thank you!

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Also, you can edit the title if you mispelt great

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O Moon, Great Moon (remade)

quasi fox
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Its not embarrasing we all make mistakes haha

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Also i am so sorry I am dealing with a lot il be slow im so sorry

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@magic ivy
Here you go! Sorry that took a while I was a lil busy

quasi fox
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quasi fox
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A lot of comments but no one liked or starred, allow me to be the first

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Oh thank you very much

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This is my first star if I'm not mistaken

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I really appreciate this

quasi fox
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Would you like to see one of my favorite pieces?

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Yes please! Hit me with your greatest poem!

quasi fox
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my greatest? well its longer...how abouyt second fav?

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Your call, man. No problem

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magic ivy
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@woeful junco

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magic ivy
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I love the poem obviously not everything can make me speechless

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Ofc

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I am glad that you liked it 😁👍

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