#How do i tell her....i love her....

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@flint plume @errant nimbus

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Its an old piece i wrote to express my feelings i couldn't put into words then

lunar nexus
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Seems like someone doesn't have em balls to confess yet

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lunar nexus
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How'd go?

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Is it a man?

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A femboy+

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I like em

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We have mutual feelings

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Im a guy. And straight

lunar nexus
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Same, but my home has potential being the best femboy

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Id like your honest opinion on the poem tho if you had the time

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*Id like your honest

opinion on the poem tho

if you had the time*

- igotclue_20
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What the— it's so good

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I'm out ✌️

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errant nimbus
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Your poem deserves an audience @short forum

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Sorry. I learned English from Tiktok

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Sorry if it's 'informal'

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✌️

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@viral thistle

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Oh my god the repetition

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viral thistle
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Take this star

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*Ah damn THANKS BRO I

WAS WORRIED THAT IT LOOKED TOO

MUCH REPETITIVE*

- igotclue_20
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mossy acorn
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the way u keep asking “how do I tell her I love her?” made me feel all the quiet battles we fight inside when love feels too big to say out loud. it reminded me of the weight of unspoken words and the beauty in loving someone even when we feel not enough.

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mossy acorn
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@solid sinew

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Honestly?

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I love this kind of repetition

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it express feelings

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The most important one

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a question that will never be answered

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solid sinew
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maybe only time will

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like some repetition disconnects the reader from the poem

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but you keep questioning it to yourself

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i like this one

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thanks for your time i appreciate it

solid sinew
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it was a good read

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i mean ur poetry is similiar to mine in some ways

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i was unsure abt posting it too

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aster and thanos encouraged me to post

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They did a good job

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If you want to read something mine

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I WOULD LOVE TO

solid sinew
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Tell me and i will tag you

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solid sinew
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@sand egret

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Now this... Is a Poem, It's Raw, Powerful, And beautiful, i love how you describe those Hidden Emotions with such power, for example a line in which i really loved is, "when my voice is a whisper drowned in the storm of her silence" respectfully, I Physically busted reading this line, I really loved this one, You're an amazing writer with a natural talent

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sand egret
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Yea sure i only posted one here though and it's really recent

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sand egret
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@hard mango

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@tired summit this is the tuned version with the suggestion of yours

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I read it bro and this is a better version than the first indeed.... Also Idk if it was intentional or a grammatical error but "would it helped if i had smiled more?" the helped... It should be help right? Or?

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*Hehe... Oh and to

correct that, you could just do

so and edit it*

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@plain lagoon

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Brooo who hurt you!! Cuz this whole poem is so sad and emotional I might actually cry fr (T.T) You can legit feel the longing in every line—like, how do you even write pieces this good?? I’ve never even been in love, but I could still feel the ache like it was mine 🥹💗 That’s how powerful your words are!!!

I loved the repetition of “how do I tell her I love her”—it stings every time, showing that confusion and helplessness so well 😭🤌💗 It’s literally like you have so much to say yet you don’t know how to say or where to begin. This poem... It’s like someone holding a knife named love—caged in their mind, heart, and soul—with trembling hands... and still letting it stab deeper, while welcoming it with open arms..

This poem is more than just sad... it’s human. And that’s why it lingers long after you’ve read it. SobbinTheLanaDelReyOut

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plain lagoon
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@winged horizon

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@marble anchor readd this when you get the timeee

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Fate- you rlly know how to express your feelings in poetry. Bro you’re gonna make me cry at how good this is😭

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I dont write thatt saadd JUST SMILE

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@humble pewter

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@jade zinc thiss one!!

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The repetition is definitely intentional in this case ("How do I tell her...")! Especially since on a technical level, they mark new segments of the text. It's pretty effective in this poem because it's utilized to evoke a sense of impossibility? Or rather, a feeling of falling short.

Repetition is easier to pull off if you're repeating specific lines especially in a specific (or even just a loose) pattern because the reader can easily identify that there's intention going on there. It's trickier when you're repeating one word alone, in no specific pattern at all.

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I'm sorry if I don't make any sense 😭 I suppose my note on repetition is less about redundancy, and more about trying to really exercise your ~imagination~ for lack of a better term hahaha. To rlly push your ability to craft images and such!

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@tacit zenith

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But reading this poem after reading the first love poem you pinged me in, I see where some of the base came from <33 it's amazing just like the rest of your poems and I think it's beautiful how you have a copy of your feelings through this point in your life. It's almost like a journal.

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Im not good with words so i use poems as my love language and communication ish~

tacit zenith
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