#Golden Fields Of Holly

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strange hollow
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"Golden Fields Of Holly

The Sun laying low
Regrets fill the air
Blissful thinking arrives
Problems to fix, a simple sew
Others do not show
In the Golden Fields of Holly.

Critiques and wonders
Personal plunders
Swept by the Golden Fields of Holly
Enduring the solitude
Yet the truth tucked away.
Praying for the all knowing
To sew the blunders
In the Golden Fields of Holly.

Golden Fields of Holly
Make me feel jolly
For my critiques and wonders shouldn't die alone
Yet I shouldn't worry
In the beauty of bliss.
A wonderful wish.

For I am just a human
In the mortal plane
Wondering the sanctity of the unknown
Wishing for my problems to be sewn.
Pleading with the insane
Yet I stand alone
In the Golden Fields of Holly."

latent cairn
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This poem does an excellent job of establishing and immersing the reader in the Golden Fields of Holly

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The poem very enchanting and I adore the imagery, although I am a bit confused about what it is about (is this kinda like a lost soul wandering the fields of asphodel?)

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The poem is so beautifully written though that I think one line simply doesn't fit. I would suggest changing "make me feel jolly" to fit the tone of the poem a bit more

strange hollow
strange hollow
# latent cairn The poem very enchanting and I adore the imagery, although I am a bit confused a...

The message I was going for was that, humans are very self centered in their problems, and no one elses, the Golden Fields Of Holly, represent the "utopia" of if humanity truly worked together. Another way of reading it is The Golden Fields Of Holly, isn't a location, but a destination of where the soul goes during intoxication. The lines "Praying for the all knowing" and "In the mortal plane Wondering the sanctity of the unknown" is to basically say that, while humans are knowledgeable, they aren't all knowing, and with other human natures, results in rationalization of the real issue, that being non cooperation. So in conclusion, The Golden Fields Of Holly, is either a utopia of where all humans live because they love each other and care for one and another, or there is the negative connotation of where intoxication, and unhealthy distractions are. I hope that cleared it up, and I get if it's hard to read, it was my first poem 👍

latent cairn
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Kudos to you if this was your first poem because this is pretty good

molten quarryBOT
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*Kudos to you if

this was your first poem because

this is pretty good*

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upper hinge
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The spiritual meaning of Holly is protection and eternal life. Knowing this and your detailed description above, it makes a lot of sense.

To have your problems sewn up gives be two images. That they're neatly solved or "swept under the rug". I am more inclined to believe that they are hidden away much like the truth is.