"Deceit"

[summer latch]

"Deceit"

People find me joyful,
And amiable,
I try to be good,
For everyone.

In this lovely world,
Where people seemed good,
A wonderful place,
That I can call home.

But nothing is real,
Just a good facade,
It's all filled with pain,
And harsh delusions.

I have been blinded,
Betrayed by the truth,
By the pain I feel,
And those I cherished,

It is all I have,
And all that can be,
Nothingness and lies,
All that's meaningless.

The world that I saw,
A haven just in thought,
In sight but is far,
Was it all a lie?

Yo @valid rapids need feedback. I haven't made poems for a while. And I still don't understand how meters work.

[delicate hull]

I like the idea but the entire piece has commas and it’s hard for me to follow

[lofty light]

Wonderful! @delicate hull has just progressed to level 6!

[delicate hull]

Yippee

[valid rapids]

OOOO its good i love how it rhymed at People find me joyful,
And amiable,
In this lovely world,
Where people seemed good,
A wonderful place,
I can call it home,
this part i like it and fits with the title perfectly

[lofty light]

Wonderful! @valid rapids has just progressed to level 12!

[summer latch]

I wasn't even trying to rhyme it💀

[summer latch]

Yo @valid rapids I revised it but still no rhyming.🥲

[static jungle]

betrayed by the truth goes hard

[valid rapids]

ouh-

People find me joyful,
And amiable,
I try to be good,
For everyone.

In this lovely world,
Where people seemed good,
A wonderful place,
That I can call home

EVEN THIS PART??