A Letter To God

[torpid jackal]

To those who shed tears and blood for their prayers to be answered
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This is a letter

Written-

By ink
By tears
By blood
That drips
From my soul

To-

You
Who pull
The strings
Of fate
Of life
Of ever after
That lies at
Your fingertips

Oh God, Please

Please-

Save me
From sorrow
From pain
From Agony
For I fear
My mortal soul, couldn't bear
Its cruelty

I shall raise my arms
For you to take
Mumble prayers in silence
For you to hear

For I simply wish
To be at peace
To laugh
To smile
Another day
Without a heavy heart
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||I wrote this while studying... And damn you Lencho you little ungrateful piece of... lets be chill. Got inspo from "Letter To God" By L. G. Fuentes. which I had to study for English exam||

||Also my vocab died out on me. I am STILL LEARNING OKAY!!!||
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I GOT THIS POEM TO MY SCHOOL MAGAZINE. YAY!

@lofty terrace @neon sail y^^ Ma silly potats

@mystic lichen MOTHER!

@magic stone @flat drift /Kirby @dusky ingot MA Review people FR.

@shell yew @cursive yarrow The legends. ||Whom I am too scared to ping lol||

@mental aspen Ma grandpa. ||mad left discord. ||

@wind meteor Hi

[vocal token]

Trust me, God doesn't burden a soul beyond what it can bear

[torpid jackal]

@buoyant ridge ||Heard you got a new computer 👀 ||

[torpid jackal]

😌

Ooh @near kite @lilac nimbus first few people I met here

@acoustic geyser ||Hope you are single now 💀 /jk||

[vocal token]

It's a good job yk I like you you kept it short but meaningful but the fact that it's so short is the reason I can't give much feedback 😭

[acoustic geyser]

Im def single for you

[torpid jackal]

Im a minor

💀

@terse plume @sinful mountain @sullen ivy @trail crescent

@magic imp I shall not forget you for I have carved your name on my brain for it to exist forever in it

[magic imp]

🥹🥹🥹 WHO IS CUTTING ONIONS

[acoustic geyser]

L

[torpid jackal]

Idk wether to say Thank you or IDK

[torpid jackal]

js read ma poem cause the words got stuck even before it reached ma throat

[magic stone]

Simple but beautiful

I like it

[vocal token]

Exactly what I said 😭

[torpid jackal]

TY

[magic stone]

Sometimes throw the vocabulary out the window

😋

[magic stone]

🤝

[torpid jackal]

My entire poem collection has -ve vocab

[torpid jackal]

@magic stone are you cutting onions?

[magic stone]

No idk how to cook 🌹

[magic stone]

That's your style stick with it

[torpid jackal]

HAHAHAHA Ill teach you hehe

[magic stone]

😋😋😋

Onion pakode (fritters) 🗣️🗣️🗣️🗣️🗣️

🗣️🎉😂😎

[torpid jackal]

I shall listen to you not just by ears but, by my heart.

[torpid jackal]

What the hell is that? Oh wait I googled it

[magic stone]

So sigma 💔

[magic stone]

Yk hindi right

[torpid jackal]

Js to read and write LMAO

I dont understand 2 shi-

@dusky ingot

@vocal girder @covert geyser

@wind mirage MA DRUNK TEXTER

[magic stone]

Then what was the point

[vocal token]

Fire frfr

[torpid jackal]

@frigid python

[magic stone]

🗣️💥🗣️🗣️🗣️🗣️🗣️💥💥

[torpid jackal]

IDK okay 😭 I was forced to learn it

[vocal token]

Absolutely no offense but so many Indians 😭😭😭😭

[torpid jackal]

FR FR. Any middle east people tho???

@wicked bridge Just tagged you hehe

@wheat zinc @wooden pasture @brittle needle The mods FR

[vocal token]

I'm Pakistani if that counts 😭

[torpid jackal]

LMAO

[magic stone]

I was as well

6th, 7th, and 8th

Whatever I learnt was enough to understand, write, and talk, with local people who spoke in Hindi

[vocal token]

Y'all are foreign Indians?

[torpid jackal]

@brazen plover @rancid hearth @toxic sentinel @formal finchHEHE

[torpid jackal]

WTH is foreign Indians?

[vocal token]

Gora pakoras

Indians living abroad

But came back for reasons god knows

[torpid jackal]

Im from middle east.

[torpid jackal]

WTH IS THAT?

[torpid jackal]

HAHAHAHA

[vocal token]

YOU SAID YOU SPOKE HINDI I THOUGHT YOU WERE INDIAN

[torpid jackal]

I DONT SPEAK HINDI I WAS FORCED TO READ AND WRITE THAT SHI-

[vocal token]

Search

[vocal token]

SO AN INDIAN SKL IN THE MIDDLE EAST

[torpid jackal]

@formal finch ||SHUSH...||

[torpid jackal]

Maybe maybe not... HEHE WE HAD A HUGE AH DISCUSSION WHERE I WAS FROM A FEW DAYS AGO

[vocal token]

UAE

[magic stone]

The whole of India knows Hindi

[vocal token]

Most likely

[torpid jackal]

Wallahi what are you sayin?

[magic stone]

So it's crucial to know

[vocal token]

South Indians don't

Lots of South Indians don't

[magic stone]

Exclude them

Easy

[torpid jackal]

Idk lmao

[vocal token]

😭😭😭

[magic stone]

😂

[vocal token]

Wallahi I have the same question

[torpid jackal]

WOAH WOAH YOU GUYZ JUST CONSIDER SOUTH AS DIFF CREATURES OR SMTH?

[vocal token]

Btw u frm the UAE right?

[torpid jackal]

maybe maybe not...

[magic stone]

Idk he said most of they don't know how to speak in Hindi so like

[vocal token]

Bruh

[magic stone]

Should've asked my then south indian bf if he knew of hindi

[pulsar cedar]

*Should've asked by then

south indian bf if

he knew of hindi*

- yellinaa._

[magic stone]

Too bad

LMAO

[torpid jackal]

😂

[magic stone]

HELP BRO YOU DIDNT HAVE TO MAKE IT A QUOTE

[torpid jackal]

I do that occasianolly

[torpid jackal]

I love dubai chocolate tho. I ate one with cheesecake taste and it was lowkey so good...

BUT WHY IS IT SO FRICKIN EXPENSIVE

[magic stone]

And i still haven't tasted ferorro rocher yet

[vocal token]

Level

Where are the Pakistanis 😔

[torpid jackal]

rafello? ATLEAST?

[magic stone]

Not like I'm poor

I'm just more into biriyani

And eat chocolate once a month for good teeth

[vocal token]

THEY'RE TWO WILDLY DIFFERENT THINGS

[magic stone]

Never heard of it

[torpid jackal]

💀

[vocal token]

BRUSH AFTERWARDS 😭😭😭

[magic stone]

Exactly

[vocal token]

Rafaello?

[torpid jackal]

💀

[magic stone]

It's a rule I made myself for myself

[vocal token]

Why compare them? 😭

[torpid jackal]

SCREW SPELLING

[magic stone]

I only know and love and am loyal to cadbury

[magic stone]

It's no comparison I'm simply stating my personal opinion lmao

[vocal token]

Cadbury is a company 😭 they have diff chocolates

[magic stone]

I eat biriyani more than i ever eat chocolate

[torpid jackal]

WE SHOULD PROB HAVE THIS CONVO ON OFF TOPIC LMAO

[magic stone]

Bro shut up I eat the 10 rs milk chocolate from cadbury is that descriptive enough for you 😭

[vocal token]

YEAH

[magic stone]

Shhh don't wake up the mods

[vocal token]

Dairy milk 😔

[magic stone]

🙏🙏🙏🙏

[buoyant ridge]

All these comments and only two likes for for this gorgeous poem 🥺

[torpid jackal]

Ik

[buoyant ridge]

MUMBLE PRAYERS in SILENCE for you to HEAR..

love that

I love the typog and this is could almost be a song

[torpid jackal]

make rizkie sing it HEHE...

[buoyant ridge]

Respectfully.. I plead the fifth

😂

[torpid jackal]

HAHAHA

Hehe. READ MA POEM OR 🔪

@placid perch I see that you always linger

[magic stone]

Me when it comes to him

[torpid jackal]

@lofty terrace get your ah up here

@muted basin

@tawny dew @ashen sundial

[tawny dew]

Very beautiful, giving pieces of yourself in hopes of receiving some relief

[muted basin]

@torpid jackal it's very nostalgic for real I remember reading this chapter and I had a laugh 😂 lencho blamed the post office worker, damn good old days , those were the best days 🤍

[torpid jackal]

YE... And I wrote a poem cause my ah was too lazy to deal with his customer care problems

[acoustic geyser]

Aeww

Its cuteee

Very lencho

[torpid jackal]

@frigid python

[torpid jackal]

@dusky ingot

[torpid jackal]

@umbral badger I have pinged you. IDK your roll number

[umbral badger]

i have been pinged last but ill allow it😂

[fast basin]

Wonderful! @umbral badger has just progressed to level 2!

[torpid jackal]

HEHE

[umbral badger]

Creative as hell, love it

[torpid jackal]

TY TY

[torpid jackal]

@undone egret

@last ocean I do not remmber tagging you sooo

[last ocean]

yo bro this is fire

this is simple but it's fire and beautiful

the typography is great

the imagery even when it's short it's really good

i'm surprised this one don't got a star yet

i'll give this one a star

[torpid jackal]

I just expiramented. if you know my other poems this is technically a new style of mine. glad you like it!!!

[undone egret]

First of all I love the presentation!!! Just the first line striked right into my heart cuz I can relate😭

And When I read the title I fr thought of the ch "A letter to god" from my english textbook lol😭

And wth I love it so much!! It not long yet it has so much depth and it really seems like a letter to god. I really relate to this poem alot cuz whenever I pray I just ask for happiness of mine and others. I always pray that "like allah please always guide me to the right don't ever abandoned me as I fear I will be astray. Idk why this poem just really connect with me I love it😭 it legit feels like you poured my prayers and conversation with the god in this poem.
Such relatable poem it is to me.

I love this so much!!
It really shows how these simple things like peace, laugh, smile and happiness are so simple yet sometimes unreacheable..
"For I simply wish
To be at peace
To laugh
To smile
Another day
Without a heavy heart"

Such majestic poem😭🤌💞

[fast basin]

Wonderful! @undone egret has just progressed to level 8!

[undone egret]

Just read that ch " A letter to god" last year in 10th grade. Really mad eme nostalgic too

[dusky ingot]

Reading

It is so beautiful!

[torpid jackal]

I am sobbing with happiness at this review. TYSM!!! And yes I did have some inspo from the english chapter. cause bruv LENCHO YOU UNGRATEFULL BRAT ILL SHOW YOU HOW WE WRITE A LETTER TO GOD. LMAO

[undone egret]

Aww I'm glad you it made you happy!!😭💞💞 lets tag each other from now on!! I love your poems!!

Lmao so u actually took refrence from that ch! Fr LENCHO WAS SUCH A BRAT, HE WAS NAIVE AND UNGRATEFUL😭 I was angry at the ending lol. And SOMEONE SHOW THIS POEM TO LENCHO!!!!! HE NEEDS TO LEARN TO WRITE A LETTER TO GOD!

[torpid jackal]

@severe jackal

@dusky ingot

[dusky ingot]

Woww fr amazing

[torpid jackal]

TY

[torpid jackal]

@neon sail Get your ah up here before I hunt you down

@obtuse mason

[obtuse mason]

this was really good

i'm so jealous
people actually reads and comment your poetry 😔

[torpid jackal]

Just tag more people hun

[torpid jackal]

TY TY

[torpid jackal]

@tribal swan

[tribal swan]

I'll try stealing this idea when I'm free, thanks for sharing!!

[torpid jackal]

TY

[tribal swan]

I mean i've read many religious scriptures and poems but the desperation for divine intervention has never been so straight forward

Nicely one

[torpid jackal]

Its cause Idk how to write crooked ngl. Im just a straight forward peep. says things straight...

[tribal swan]

You speak your mind?😭😂

Good luck enjoying the illusion of love in this forsaken world

[pulsar cedar]

*Good luck enjoying

the illusion of love in

this forsaken world*

- quantum_quazar

[tribal swan]

Bet not everyone's gonna like that

[torpid jackal]

oh yeah waaaayyy too much its kinda funny

[tribal swan]

😂😂

[neon sail]

i have a few things to say gimme a min

okay so firstly
this is by far your longest poem written(that ive seen) and im proud of you for that
secondly

I ABSOLUTELY LOVE THIS

this was a very fun read and i see that youre playing around with typography

YOU COOKING WITH THIS

such vivid and visceral emotions soo amazingly laid out

it has such depth to it and its just really amazing

i knew youd cook with long poem I JUST KNEW IT

and i was right

your use of repetition here is just the cherry on top

cause gosh dang it

this was really fun to read

i felt like a lamb born only to have blind faith

AND YOU THINK I DIDNT NOTICE?

WRITTEN

TO

PLEASE

[torpid jackal]

👀

[neon sail]

i do not know if its intentional but this is my favorite bit

[pulsar cedar]

*i do not know if

its intentional but this

is my favorite bit*

- biennyyyy

[neon sail]

i love it

[torpid jackal]

It was intentional hehe

[neon sail]

you get a star

and a mega star

WELL PENNED ALINA

[torpid jackal]

And yes I played around with typography

and made it longer

LIKE BEN BEN SAID

[neon sail]

yes good job im proud of ya for that

[torpid jackal]

[torpid jackal]

I was supposed to study for english lmao. like its actually a chapter and I ended up ditching english

had exams

[neon sail]

very good exams are temporary poems are forever

[dusky ingot]

@dusky ingot

[torpid jackal]

I expect you reply within 2-3 business days now

[wind mirage]

Moi lobz 😋

[torpid jackal]

Moi hugs you

[wind mirage]

I'm Christian btw so I have to believe

Dat hiz got a better plan 😭

[torpid jackal]

ye

[torpid jackal]

@chilly monolith

[torpid jackal]

@limpid dawn

[flat drift]

DAT COMPOSITION

Mwah

Late to the party but that's just me

Alina you are evolving

Gentle swaying typography, small natural rhymes for extra emphasis... niiiiiice

Keep on going gurl

[torpid jackal]

KIRBY!!! FINALLY AND DONT WORRY AT least your here ||unlike someone. yes @dusky ingot I meant you. duhh is also VERY VERY late. Im about to beat that bi- up. ||

||P.S I get it tho lmao. IM JUST JOKING TAKE YOUR TIME||

[torpid jackal]

YEP. your knife did the job lmfao

[dusky ingot]

Hie hie hie

[torpid jackal]

-_- my hyper whatever (forgot what its called) is acting up waiting for you!!!

@magic imp I think I alr ping you but my brain forgot

[frigid python]

Woahh you Indian bro???
Also, I love the topography. I like the way you refer to the calling, simple yet longing. Good job

[torpid jackal]

TY TY and I am infact a desert person

[torpid jackal]

@native cloud @midnight timber

[native cloud]

This is really cool

And I like the typography here

[midnight timber]

Ohhhh

Thats called typography ? I never used it and the bold thats very nice

I should learn more brah i have been rawdawging my poem just put sentences and thats it

[woven quail]

@glacial thunder is now following @torpid jackal.

[torpid jackal]

did not expect that for some reason

[glacial thunder]

you're a really good poet and I loved this poem too so I look forward to reading your other poems

[torpid jackal]

🥹 since when did my tear glands become uncontrolable...

[torpid jackal]

@plush rivet

[torpid jackal]

@solar pulsar

[torpid jackal]

@solemn void

[torpid jackal]

@vast wharf

It been sometime

Since I wrote

[torpid jackal]

@sullen scarab

@obsidian gust

@vital coral

[sullen scarab]

What a grovelling shin splinting supplication to God. I like it

[pulsar cedar]

*What a grovelling

shin splinting supplication

to God. I like it*

- Crimewave

[sullen scarab]

"Tell me God are you punishing me?
Is this the price I'm paying for my past mistakes?"

[torpid jackal]

[vital coral]

I promise i will resd this one tomorrow its too late rn

@vital coral

@vital coral

[torpid jackal]

@proven pilot

[proven pilot]

i like how u have structured it

[torpid jackal]

Umm ty 🥹

[vital coral]

Yeah It's really well structured, and intense, lovely. Its okayyy your vocabulary its beautiful