the unbreakable wall or so she thought

[heavy timber]

I love it:3

[vagrant raft]

thank youu

[vagrant raft]

@restive mason

[restive mason]

""it'll keep me safe", i tell myself a lie full of torture "
"the wall screams "I'm keeping you safe", so predictable"
"a crack so small yet my heart starts aching"
i loved these linessss
AND BEAUTIFUL POEMMMMMMMMM I LOVE IT @vagrant raft

AND BROOOOO

BROOOOOOOO

i remembered my poem

when I reached

the 2nd half

ITS ALMOST EXACTLY SAMEEE

LMAOOO

YOU WANT TO READ???

[vagrant raft]

DEFFFF

TAG MEEE

@restive mason

[vagrant raft]

THANK YOU VERY VERY MUCHHH

[restive mason]

hmmm one problem though. Haven't posted it

[vagrant raft]

OHHH- well now i have smth to look forward to

can i know how long it'll take..?

[restive mason]

HMMM SHOULD I POST OR NOOO

[vagrant raft]

hmm honestly ur choice if u want to go ahead cuz ima be waiting sooo buh if u don't wanna then..

👀

[restive mason]

https://tenor.com/view/cj-gta-gta-san-adreas-gif-19181393

[vagrant raft]

sooo

do u wanna or..

??

[restive mason]

HMMMMMMMM

https://tenor.com/view/batman-thinking-thinking-about-you-think-thinking-of-you-gif-20503421

[vagrant raft]

( if u don't wanna can i atleast see it ur no. 1 fan)

👀

👁️ 👄 👁️

[restive mason]

I've already posted it in another server so its fine ig

i'll post

[vagrant raft]

ohh ok

YAAAYYYYY

[restive mason]

you'll make me cry

[vagrant raft]

good tears or bad tears..??

[restive mason]

broo i just remembered I haven't named the poem properly lol
I'll think of a suitable name and post.

[vagrant raft]

OHHH

ofc

[restive mason]

||gold tears ||

[vagrant raft]

at least not bad ones

tag me when u do post it

[restive mason]

ahh i'll just post

i couldn't get a good title even after trying for like 2 days

[vagrant raft]

OMG RLLY??

LOVE THE

DEDICATIONNN

[restive mason]

yeah imagine getting a writer's block while writing a title💀💀

[restive mason]

done.

[vagrant raft]

that is js tortureee

they be going on for days and days

[restive mason]

fr bruh

[restive mason]

my first and the longest writer's block lasted 2 years

that too after just 2 poems

💀💀

[restive mason]

and this was the 2nd fyi

💀 🙏

[vagrant raft]

OH MAH GAWDDDD

[left adder]

Wonderful! @vagrant raft has just progressed to level 6!

[vagrant raft]

WOAHHHH

THANK GOD I NEVER HAD ANY OF THOSE

[restive mason]

2nd as in

2nd writer's block

[vagrant raft]

but i js started like a few months ago

[vagrant raft]

OHHH

[restive mason]

i pray you never get it

😂

[vagrant raft]

LMAO

TYYYY

BUT WOAHHHHH

TWO

WHOLE

[restive mason]

[vagrant raft]

YEARS

WOW

[restive mason]

yeah

[vagrant raft]

*applause

[restive mason]

😵‍💫

[restive mason]

why t f

💀

[vagrant raft]

bc u didn't give up on it

applause for the hard thinking u did

for two whole yrs

[restive mason]

i sort of did

but

started writing again because of a competition

[vagrant raft]

ouh-

[restive mason]

lol

[vagrant raft]

STILLL

[restive mason]

and that prompt was really good

[vagrant raft]

i would js go for pinterest hehe

[vagrant raft]

OOOOOOOO

[restive mason]

i could feel i was writing better than before as well

alr gtg now ttyl :3

[vagrant raft]

awh thats nice to hear

[vagrant raft]

u toooo bye byeee

[vagrant raft]

@pliant folio @zinc bough

[pliant folio]

@vagrant raft damnn that's beautiful!!

[vagrant raft]

thanksss

[vagrant raft]

@flat pecan

[vagrant raft]

@ocean onyx

@low trail

[vagrant raft]

@slim dirge

@copper cairn

[vagrant raft]

@bitter halo

[bitter halo]

beauitful poem, im proud @vagrant raft

[vagrant raft]

DUDE YOU'RE SUCH A FAST READER

ALL THAT WITHIN SECONDS??

wow

*applause

@magic tendon

@tame valve

[vagrant raft]

@mossy smelt

[mossy smelt]

LOVE IT SO MUCH FR

[vagrant raft]

@harsh cedar @arctic reef

[harsh cedar]

A work of art

[vagrant raft]

@robust mason

[vagrant raft]

same same.. im still waiting for this to become true 🤧

[vagrant raft]

@weary path

[vagrant raft]

@pale coyote

[vagrant raft]

@untold rune

[vagrant raft]

@weak helm

[weak helm]

I honestly think this poem should be split into two

The first half feels like a different story than the latter half

Although they are connected by the wall, I think the story starting midway through feels out of left field

That said, I really liked "delusions fill up my mind, thinking of the divine"

reminds me of a line I wrote a few months ago, "as I waste my hours
Caught up in the greater powers"

[vagrant raft]

yeshhh thank you so much for the feedback i appreciate it and so glad you liked it

💐

[vagrant raft]

@ivory hinge feedbacks..?

[weary path]

This was such a beautiful journey from fear to love!!! The wall metaphor was powerful so real and relatable!!!!!!!!!!!(* >ω<)💗💗💗 I loved how the ending felt like healing wrapped in warmth. Soft, emotional, and full of hope. 💗✨

[vagrant raft]

thank you so muchhh it was exactly that ty for reading my poemsss

[modern knot]

*thank you so muchhh it

was exactly that ty

for reading my poemsss*

- bdjkcuqvowibq

[vagrant raft]

@night lark

[night lark]

.

I love it, it's just yk, the way u use the metaphor, it's just so deep and the ending it was just full of emotions, I loved it

keep writing more, your name might be nobody but you are a great poettt!!!

[vagrant raft]

awhhh thank youuu 🤧 i really appreciate it

[vagrant raft]

@iron grove

[vernal shell]

the ending made me smile
this is beautiful
i like the narrative about the impossible becoming possible
hope in hopelessness
the more she trembled, the weaker the wall got
Started to hope, and that's when she became free from the thought

[woven iron]

@vagrant raft is now following @gusty drift.

[vagrant raft]

@restive pelican hi hiii this is my fav poemmm I hope you like it

[woven iron]

@vagrant raft is now following @restive pelican.

[vagrant raft]

@winter cipher

[winter cipher]

i looooveee how u used a wall to describe the situation and the transition from sad to happy

[vagrant raft]

thank youuu ma crush gave me the inspo for this too 🤧

[vagrant raft]

@pliant folio

[vagrant raft]

@rain wharf

[vagrant raft]

@wide pewter

[vagrant raft]

There's a wall built deep inside, doesn't crumble down,
Not the walls that protect nor accept, one's easy found,
Strong and steady, no risk no future,
"It'll keep me safe", i tell myself a lie full of torture,

Find myself wanting to go out this wall, see the world with new eyes,
Desiring so much more, a life, a happy sight,
Need to feel peace in your arms, safe and sound,
The comfort i must have, my heart dreaming to be found,

There's a wall, so invincible, pain unbearable,
A wall so big, so stubborn, its non negotiable,
Fears locked, nightmares haunt me, unforgettable,
The wall screams "I'm keeping you safe", so predictable

Delusions fill up my mind,
Thinking of the divine,
Lately this wall has been cracking,
A crack so small yet my heart starts aching..

There's a wall unbreakable, she once told,
A smile played on her lips, the walls shaked,
Once believed freedom was out of reach, not anymore,
Happiness doesn't exist, she thought she was forever alone,

One day comes a man,
Yes! the one that saves the girl,
Few smiles, shy glances exchanged, flutters in their hearts,
Yes! a new chapter awaits, she's looking forward to the next parts,

There was a wall, trapped every beautiful thought, entertained fear,
Now diminished, she's free to tour,
A loving man next to her, wrapped around her finger,
Yes! the one from before, the fears no longer linger,

No looking back, she promised herself,
Soon encouraged by a warm kiss on her forehead,
A whisper in her ear, made the universe freeze,
Three magical words escaped his lips, she's at ease,
So a happily ever after does exist, she now knew,
Only because of the man she gave her heart to,

@icy ermine

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