#home. ~ by Bread
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crystal glacier
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I really like the acrostic and the message is really cool too!
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cobalt lark
The acrostic is a very cute, neat detail in an already lovely poem. It asks a great question and answers it in a not necessarily new way, but a you way. I think the execution was pretty solid.
I also really like how the overall vocabulary changes in the second half of the poem. The clearer you are on what "home" is, your vocab is substantially more clear- less flowery. Reminds me of the saying
"Understanding something is to explain it simply"
The typography isn't anything crazy but I think it really works for this poem. I enjoyed the title being spaced apart as it is, it just works- looks nice on the page.
Lastly, for now, I REALLY like that last line.
"what you make of yourself"
Not For but of. That detail really rings to me. That home isn't built upon what you build, but the internal mechanism you create when you live.
Throughly enjoyable🫀
crystal glacier
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