#Wicked Man

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royal hinge
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@bitter quail

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Been very long since I wrote this, haven't had anybody review it yet

royal hinge
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@wanton garnet Here

wanton garnet
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wanton garnet
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Oh I love the various references to divine figures you make.
This poem reads like a time old legend. Good job!

royal hinge
wanton garnet
royal hinge
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Yoooo thanks a lot!!!!

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Hadn't had a feedback on this piece for a longg time

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Appreciate it alot!!!!

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You are never inadequate or incompetent to state any form of opinions. For we are all imperfect ourselves.

Andd, Ill definitely be patiently waiting for the time you give this piece a re-read and try to work through it in a file!!!

Thanks for your words, really appreciate your time 🖤 !

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Woah that's quite a long time.

But no, Im not putting constraints on your imaginative capability, focus on whatever you prefer to focus on. As long as its constructive criticism that'll help me grow, Im welcoming!!

Have fun with life till September ig 🖤

royal hinge
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Awww, good luck on your projects and I hope you don't end up burning yourself out! Gibheart

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A woman wizard 🧙‍♀️ SobbinTheLanaDelReyOut

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@sterile mist

ocean onyx
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@ornate mulch

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@gritty frost

gritty frost
royal hinge
gritty frost
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White hole and black hole were destined to switch,
As fate would make red sky and white moon glitch. nice lines

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spice minnow
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tyty :D

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oh that's gorgeous too 😭

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your rhyme and diction are amazing

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man I love this line though "Justice how cruel father, where child kills child"

keen hillBOT
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*man I love this line

though "Justice how cruel father,

where child kills child"*

- jewelsrock_12345
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*I thought for so much

on lines like these lmao, like

not even kidding*

- whatami4554
spice minnow
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it's impressive how coherent it is linguistically, but the impact it has on the reader could be made stronger by having a stronger thematic coherency throughout the poem

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I can see how you use the idea of duality throughout the poem, but if you carried a motif, like the birds throughout it it could make the stanzas better connected

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but really I loved it

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💜

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oh I see!

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well in that case i got no comments

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brilliant poem 👍

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Im sorry!

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Ill read it a few more times over the next few days and message if I find any improvements o7

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I digest poems rather slowly

keen hillBOT
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*This poem took months

of thoughts and reading Christian

scriptures anyways*

- whatami4554
spice minnow
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ooo

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that's very impressive

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still amazing really

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I never read the Bible the entire way through

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just pick the parts that are my favorite 🤣

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ohoo

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I like Psalms so I read that a lot more than the others

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cuz its also poetic :>

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ykyk

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I am unaware of which section that is- I learned the Bible in Korean honestly 🤣

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well, I speak English, Chinese, Korean and Spanish

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you can decide which I am :P

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^^

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true, but you did ask where I'm from based on a language I read

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so I provided u with possibilities

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o7

void raven
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So like the Wicker Man but wicked

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Nah man, this is absolutely brilliant

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I might need you to explain to me what the deeper meaning is because I'm not so familiar with this kind of storytelling

(Brilliant imagery and language I'm quite impressed by this)

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This is my favourite part

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In fact I would love to link this somewhere in my own story (like reference a stanza or something)

With your permission of course

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but i'm just not sure as to the whole message (?)

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Yeah just the meaning

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You put in that work. Respect

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Its inspired by Greek mythology I'm sure this could help

also love your Selene reference in this too

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right

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Okay I mostly had that down but i just wanted to know if i missed something

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Great stuff my friend

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have a star

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Hey i bookmarked it, will dive into it multiple times!