#Summer

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wild scaffold
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On a rocky boulder,
creaks mahogany,
warped and rubbing against the stone it's fixed.

Cracking as the wind,
with its sweetening scent of the woods deep below,
gently caresses it.

At the top, a horizon
of far off lands, with lush greenery.
Reminiscing the times of an unknown past.
Sitting at the vestibule,
I endure the humid summer night.

Shutting my eyes I seek peace,
But I share with none,
the glimpses of a sweet, possibly a Mid-Sommar day.

A midsommar day,
of flowing blackwater rivers.
Of solid cliffs, laden with glowing mud,
akin to black till.
Of dried voluptous riverines,
with shapes too intricate,
to be hidden beneath a veil of water.

A midsommar day,
where sunflowers,
cloaking the tilled black soil beneath,
beautifully paint the horizon with it's yellow,
and where white figs hang like earrings,
to close to the branch,
yet noticeable.

A midsommar day,
of smiling dark cherries,
in clusters, amidst the bold leaves.
Almost as such to utter a word as they sway.
And of scorched boulders of rock,
as they continue to bask,
embedding itself within the smoky visage of the soul.

A midsommer day,
where a stalk of wheat dances
to the western winds.
In response to the ethereal calls of the redwing.
And as the farmer's dogs bark...

At sudden,
I am back at the vestibule,
bright summer morning burning my skin.
Dry air forced down the lungs.
Scorching heat cooking away old rotten dreams.

As I sit,
A strange autumn leaf sways in,
singed and burnt, I witness it burn away to oblivion,
under the searing Sun.
Leaving behind a scent quite subtle and unforgettable.

Just then another autumn leaf halts,
from it's long, untimely travels.
Sent by a far away tree. As it sent before.
I then wonder,
to usher it in or to lay ignorant,
as it shall, as it did once before,
catch fire and cease.

I stare into it,
as it too shall catch fire.
Witness it,
as I lay seated at the vestibule,
on a cold boulder.

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Summer

manic axle
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Firstly beautiful beautiful imagery painted via your words.
I would use some other colored soil description since you spoke about blackwater rivers and black till and then we again have black soil so it seems repetitive to me.

I didn't quite get the "embedding itself within the smoky visage of the soul".

Other than that the poem is quite evocative.

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I so love your powerful descriptions of nature.

wild scaffold
# manic axle Firstly beautiful beautiful imagery painted via your words. I would use some oth...

Thank you so much. Glad you liked it.
Regarding the soil colour, it's a deliberate choice as the Summer and Autumn here are two different persons. The black colour soil referring to the skin and blackwater rivers referring to the hair of the first person (Summer). The descriptions in the stanzas concerning Summer are descriptive of the person herself. The stanzas concerning Autumn is of another person whom the speaker decides to abandon. With hopeless yet unwavering pursuit of an envisioned/fantasized Summer.

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The boulders are her eyes. How they get fixed into the soul once she the speaker catches a look at it.

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wild scaffold
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@chilly drift This poem's the most recent one.

hot ledge
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I love the sunflower lines

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I can’t give feedback but I absolutely loved it

wild scaffold
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Thank you

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wild scaffold
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@frozen saddle

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@icy flame

merry hemlock
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I like how it starts and ends with boulder. And the melody is so beautiful. The Imageries are so vivid I could imagine it in my mind

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You write so beautiful @wild scaffold
It starts with so much of peace and then the melancholic tone and ends with stillness of emotions. A halt. I loved it

wild scaffold
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Thank you so much @merry hemlock . Glad you liked it!

icy flame
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This soo good it makes me wanna

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icy flame
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Such beautiful imagery man, I eat up poems like these, I also like the representation of the seasons

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This is beautiful

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