#Ballad For a Peony

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red tiger
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After shedding blood and tears,
Gray skies, fading with no trace.
Sunlight grazes the soil,
By a clock’s tick can history efface.

Debris scattered onto the ground,
Foliage mixed with shrapnel remain.
Calamity’s hints persist,
Erased efforts proven to be in vain.

As smoke fills the sky,
Heaven weeps in pity,
Storms brew in the horizon,
For the tragedy of this city.

Sorrows descend from clouds,
The Earth kissed by a thousand sighs.
Each drop revives sleeping roots,
Where life begins as old hope dies.

Within nests of steel and ammo,
Where life can have no place.
As a singular bud sprouts,
It unveils its grace.

From cracks of concrete,
Peony rises with a distinct hue.
A blue, reflective of the ocean,
Signs of a beginning anew.

Petals tender as silk,
Blooming at every sight.
In quiet whispers of the breeze,
Left to bask in the light.

With dusk approaching,
Freshened by a cool, gentle dew.
In silence’s serenity,
Its colors stay true.

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red tiger
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@fading rivet @fair river @heavy goblet

dense tapir
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Hey hi and hello! Good morning, I'm pooped... but this was a wonderful ballad! Beautifully timed, beat by burning beat you got me to sing it! Great work here and beautiful imagery! I love the focus to a single flower from the chaos prior... even though it's shown that a field of flowers is sprouting through. The persistance of life is one of my favorite themes! :]

Theone thing that cought my eye was that you used "Debris" twice in the same sentence on stanza 2. Changing the second case could be advantageous. Maybe "broken"?

Anything else would be my own nitpicking, like I wouldn't say blue, leaving it implied as blue is evident and with the accompanied image I can see it is the color of the ocean. so it's just redundant in the same line... beautiful imagery though!

Thanks for writing and sharing this ballad.

red tiger
heavy goblet
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Woooow