#the art of almost

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mellow dew
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was it casual?
when you said my name,
like it was fated to be yours?

like it was meant to fall from your lips,
a single syllable,
so delicate,
so untouchable.

did you even notice?
how your voice softened,
as though one word,
one name,
could carry the weight of everything?

did you notice how i froze,
just for a moment,
as if trying to catch my breath —
like the air had been stolen from my lungs,
like i could live a whole lifetime
inside the sound of my name
if it came from your mouth?

and then,
in that moment,
it felt like nothing else mattered,
except the way my name sounded when you said it,
like it was everything,
like it had a life of its own,
and for a second,
i wondered if i was meant to hear it at all.

but,
somewhere between your words and the silence,
your hands found mine,
just like that,
as if the world had always been waiting
like it was an instinct,
like you’d done it a thousand times before,
like it always belonged in yours.

for a moment,
the world around us fell away.
like there was no one else,
no one else to see us like this.

it was just us,
suspended in time.

i watched your fingers brush mine,
like they were learning the shape of me,
like we were meant to fit.

i fell into your touch
like it was my own;
i fell into the softness of your skin
against mine,
like it was the only thing that made sense.

but somewhere between then and now,
something changed.

a different day,
a different moment.

something shifted —
sudden. unexpected.

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i turned,
and your eyes found mine,
like you didn't mean to,
yet you didn't look away,
as if something in you hesitated,
like you were lost,
like you had been wandering for ages,
only running in circles,
always finding your way back;
back to me.

we never talked about it,
but god, we both knew.

you looked at me
like you’d been waiting your whole life,
feeling something
we were never brave enough to name.

it was like a spark in the dark,
and suddenly
i couldn't look away either,
i couldn't bring myself to.

for a moment,
the world around us stopped,
yet again.
the air between us thickened,

and all i could hear
was the rush of my heart
beating in my chest,
too loud for a moment like this.

all i could feel
was the weight of your gaze,
holding me there,
like it was enough
to stop time.

i waited,
thinking you would say something,
thinking you would stay in this moment—
but you only smiled,
and the world started moving again.

but i stayed
in the almost,
because for me
that was all it took—

a glance,
a heartbeat,
a name—
to fall all over again.

but i wonder—
if you ever said my name
when i wasn't there to hear it.

maybe,
just maybe,
for once,
you did.

zealous jasper
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Beautifully written! I also love how (at least from my point of view) there are 2 ways to understand this: either someone suffering from an unrequited love, or the love DID happen, in that very moment, but ultimately fell short, making this even more tragic.
Sorry if I might be misreading it a bit, but I wouldn’t know, never fell in love xd

mellow dew
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noo you read it in the best way possible 😭😭

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bcs the love did happen and it did fell short and i was reminiscing while writing this which is all so tragic

bronze flax
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wow! this poem is really great

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mellow dew
tawny nimbus
# mellow dew was it casual? when you said my name, like it was fated to be yours? like it wa...

This piece is hauntingly beautiful and emotionally evocative. It reads like a quiet confession wrapped in vulnerability and longing. The emotional depth is evident, especially in lines like "i could live a whole lifetime / inside the sound of my name," which captures that intimate, breath-catching moment where love feels both inevitable and fleeting. The tactile imagery, like "your fingers brush mine" and "the softness of your skin," creates a cinematic sense of closeness. The gradual shift in tone toward the end is graceful and poignant.

The structure, with its lowercase style and line breaks, perfectly suits the vulnerability and introspection you're aiming for. The repetition of "did you notice?" adds a rhythmic pulse and reflects the growing realization of something significant, while the contrast between "then and now" enhances the feeling of change.

tawny nimbus
# mellow dew i turned, and your eyes found mine, like you didn't mean to, yet you didn't look...

This poem really captures that quiet, intense connection between two people. You’ve made the unspoken moments feel so real—like when eyes meet and everything else fades away. The way you describe the hesitation and the weight of a glance really pulls you in. There’s a rawness in the idea of being stuck in that “almost” moment, where everything feels like it could be something, but never quite is. The ending, with the question about whether the name was ever said when you weren’t there, adds a beautiful sense of longing and wonder. It’s like that perfect, bittersweet feeling we’ve all experienced—something just out of reach, yet so deeply felt.

mellow dew
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awwww thankyouuuu smmmm 🫶

mellow dew
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the art of almost

thick turtle
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Better title

mellow dew
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thanks

wide wave
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This was so good!! I didn’t get bored at all, and was anticipating what was next until the end. You did a great job!!

quasi monolith
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So many masterpieces on this server, this is one of the best I've found so far

mellow dew
mellow dew
uneven heath
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love this so amazing\