That's such a great description of a moment, vivid and accurate while keeping it engaging, great job! Now, I'm no expert, but I do feel like imagery and comparison outside of the moment could make it even better 
#half a heartbeat
long ibex
oblique coral
thankyouuu
oblique coral
That's such a great description of a moment, vivid and accurate while keeping it...
outside of the moment as in?
long ibex
outside of the moment as in?
Like zooming out from the two people and describing the atmosphere, and as such
south barnBOT
Like zooming out from the two people and describing the atmosphere, and as such
Wonderful! @long ibex has just progressed to level 1!
oblique coral
Like zooming out from the two people and describing the atmosphere, and as such
ohhhh
ill try that