#Fragility of Connections

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short pasture
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A daisy is innocent until it learns to wilt.
Children pick them with chubby,
grass-stained fingers,
pluck them bald for the sake of love or something like it.

“He loves me… he loves me not…”
A game of guessing the heart,
while the flower quietly dies in your hand.

You sent me a peony once.
Blush-pink and trembling with the weight of meanings I didn’t understand.
bashfulness,
hidden affection,
fragile hope pressed between perfumed folds.
It rotted in a jar on my windowsill before I knew how to say,
“I feel the same.”

Violets are modesty, they say.
But I’ve only ever seen them bruised on the ground,
tender as a secret kept too long.
And lilacs? First love.
So why did they smell like your goodbye?

I keep a notebook now.
Cataloging blooms like sins.
A sprig of lavender for the sleep I never get,
baby’s breath for the apologies too soft to matter,
and forget-me-nots…
well, I remember.
God, I remember.

Sometimes I think flowers know too much.
Rooted in soil but always reaching for light,
aching toward something that won’t stay.
Their beauty is in the dying.
Their language,
in the silence between petals.

So give me a marigold for grief.
A chrysanthemum for truth.
And nothing at all..

if you cannot speak in flowers.

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@dusk hull thank you for the suggestion btw, i had fun making thissss

fiery sable
# short pasture A daisy is innocent until it learns to wilt. Children pick them with chubby, g...

Your poem vibrantly uses flower as a metaphor. Having a different flower for different seasons of life. Attributing personalities to them and emotions using beautiful imagery, "A daisy is innocent until it learns to wilt.", "Blush-pink and trembling with the weight of meanings I didn't understand.....fragile hope pressed between perfumed folds.", "Sometimes I think flowers know too much.......in the silence between petals.".
Flowers are used as a means of transferring emotions, a medium of connection. This follows the ending line "And nothing at all..../ if you cannot speak in flowers.".

The fragility of human connection is compared to that of flowers: "Violets are modesty, they say./ But I've only ever seen them bruised on the ground". The feelings we share are in hesitation and we pick them apart to find something, only for the feelings to be torn beyond recognition, "A game of guessing the heart,/ while the flower quietly dies in your hand.". The lines "aching toward something that won't stay./Their beauty is in the dying./Their language,/in the silence between petals." give a stark notion of connections: that they are sooner or later, bound to break.

Your poem is beautifully written and rich with imagery and warm lines. The metaphorical use of flowers is interesting and unique (I haven't seen something like it before), had to double check myself to confirm whether I properly understood it. Loved reading it. Thanks for sharing.

(I'm sorry that this is completely inorganized, my brain is barely functioning right now. My interpretation is probably screwed but oh well.)

dusk hull
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oh, this is beautiful. each flower has a soul of their own, so quiet to the passerbys, communicative to the observant (you)

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each flower embraces its meaning and brings no chance, perhaps your partner and relationship should remain the same, unchanged, even if you wish something else

sweet slate
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Alright this is one of my favourites actually

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I love how you used the language of flowers in this

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Honestly amazing

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Your style is LOVELY

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It's somewhat serene in a way that is tender, which I adore

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Even the melancholy is easily felt in your words

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I love this a lot

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The third stanza is my favourite

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Amazing job with this poem

fervent shell
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Lovely imagery for all senses. I love the temporal element, that the beauty is in its death (which is why now I buy flowers). What do you think about wilting sunflowers out of interest?
Thank you for the poem!

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