#The Virgin Piper

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mortal magnet
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A purple piper sat upon clouds of cities
In a pavilion of islands of pink
He played for nobody
As he watched water turn to gold.

The Virgin Mary rode on the naked flame of night.

A circus of magnesium holes took their hands and touched laughter
Flowing from the mouths of catatonic men,
The saints of mercury swam down the river of Venus
In November coffins of the flame they called juju.

On a midsummers day in 1919, the wind of the waves rested on a bastard soul.

Down in the pyramids dedicated to the Angel of fire
An ocean child stood on the light of oblivion,
The Lord of the universe wept with the angels of the white star,
As the ocean child was lost to the cliffs of fire.

A golden butterfly flew from the magenta sea to the bed of nettles,
reaching out to the Shepard of white sands
His herd had abandoned him many moons ago,
He was cursed to wander this world alone.

He was blinded by a black obelisk
And drowned in a sea of blood and bile
The devil had chosen a cruel punishment for a poor man.

The leper lead the requiem for the children of Orion
Their ashes scattered west
Away from light of the world
He wept a single tear from his crystal ball
And then he turned to bones.

A dark lamb exited the house of the sleeping,
For a princess in white was calling for her saviour.

You will become naked
In the eyes of the angels
For they follow the sunflower sunset
Sent to them by the 7 moons
Of the jade sky
Created by the lady of the lake.

a wax cross sat melting
burning atop the cliffs of fire.

A vase flew in darkness,
bursting into 1000 lights
that drip from rusted chains
Only for those who are naked.

inner nest
mortal magnet
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You recited this exactly how it should be recited, thank you so much.

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The pauses between the stanzas and interludes are good, normally people just rush into them.

inner nest
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oooh that new stanza

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I'll do a reread and include it later, I messed up a couple times anyway

inner nest
mortal magnet
inner nest
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I'll take some time to decrypt it line by line later

mortal magnet
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thats good

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I just had it recited in vc and I think it flopped but at least you like it, that gives me hope.

inner nest
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aesthetically its amazing

mortal magnet
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its new anyway, nobody understands new things.

mortal magnet
inner nest
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in recitals flashy stuff usually wins the crowd over, this has flash but its a lil more cryptic and ominous than what jives in traditional spoken word

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dont worry too much about that

mortal magnet
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@autumn flax

autumn flax
# mortal magnet A purple piper sat upon clouds of cities In a pavilion of islands of pink He p...

each line of this poem has wonderful imagery and beautiful metaphors. lines like 'virgin mary rode on the naked flame of night (even the 'flame of night' in this part) and then 'the angel of fire and the ocean child' which bring out contradictory terms to on another are gorgeously expressed. i love the representation of colours in poems, the way they bring out how something should feel. overall, beautiful poem i love this!

mortal magnet
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I'm glad you love it.

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I feel like my cut up method is getting better

autumn flax
mortal magnet
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thank you! :)

mortal magnet
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@delicate blade

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hope you enjoy

inner nest
delicate blade
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i reaad this

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and i was immediantly like OH ...this reads like a

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this reads like the divine comedy or smth

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(i read the divine comedy 2 months ago)

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its giving im back when poetry was cool back in the Renaissance and stuff

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also like the 17th to 19th centuries

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ITS GVING SLAY

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AND ALSO RAPTURE

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for some reason

mortal magnet
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hell yeah

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Furina approved

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I'm glad you like it

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I've never read the divine comedy but I've heard its good

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so its nice to have my word compared to it.

delicate blade
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✨✨✨✨its a piece of cornerstone poetry id say

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AND THIS IS LIKE REALLY GOOD

mortal magnet
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those are all my cut up poems so far I think

delicate blade
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K

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WARNING

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IM STUPID

mortal magnet
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hehe me too :p

delicate blade
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and dont understand

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so

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YOU WILL

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NEED TO TELL ME

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WHAT HAPPENED

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IN EVERY POEM

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like the main theme

mortal magnet
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well Rose

delicate blade
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i wanna know

mortal magnet
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the thing is my poems have no main theme or meaning

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I invite you to come and make your own meaning

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in the tales that I write

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you have this freedom of interpretation with my work

delicate blade
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fork

mortal magnet
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so it can mean anything

delicate blade
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im stupid

mortal magnet
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you just have to find these meanings

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I'm sure you arent stupid

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dont down play yourself

delicate blade
mortal magnet
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lol

delicate blade
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....

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help whats the least confusing

mortal magnet
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or lands of white sands (version 2)

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-# I should probably post the first version of that poem sometime soon.

delicate blade
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k

mortal magnet
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@marble sleet This is a recent one, its one of my favourites.

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WOW. your poem is a powerful and surreal . it doesn’t follow a traditional narrative but feels somewhat like a series of vivid, symbolic visions. the language you used is so rich and evocative, as if im feeling like i was experiencing the poem itself and that's what i love in this piece. i love it!!

mortal magnet
stoic trellis
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This is amazing man

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I love how it's also a purple piper from the king crimson song

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I love this

mortal magnet
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@lilac drift

mortal magnet
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@olive quartz

olive quartz
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i like your stuff a lot

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it is sad that some of your work has not recieved the attention that they should

mortal magnet
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and the black obelisk part was ripped from a different poem of mine, a majority of this poem is cut up

mortal magnet
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and sorry for taking time getting round to your replies.

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I normally just mark the server as read when I get pings cus normally its just people pinging in feedback :p

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