A mouse so small

[drifting tapir]

I rushed this a bit because I really wanted to get my thoughts out before I lose them

Oh how small you are
Filled with all the love in the world
Love so big so brave
Loving someone so much bigger than you with all the more love to give

You live in a world too big for you
Your trust is so big
Trusting someone so large to treat you so gently
I could never blame you for biting back
When you live in a world 500 times your size
You'll always come back licking my wounds

I just need feed back on ways to make the flow better
And any else that might be helpful 🙏

[karmic willow]

This one's really cute, I like it.

As for suggestions on flow, I can't be of much help, sorry.

[drifting tapir]

It's fine, thank you though :D

[reef mirage]

This is an okay poem. However, I suggest adding punctuations to improve flow and clarity

[patent rapids]

Wonderful! @reef mirage has just pregressed to level 8!

[reef mirage]

Also your break end on the first line of your first stanza is rather wonky in my opinion. Try use prepositions, pronouns, or conjunction to give that gasping effect, if you aim for that kind of effect

That would make your free verse nicer to read