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ocean sun
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"I don't believe in the afterlife but
If there was"-

Would you love me
If I was the bird-
Singing on your window?

Maybe if I was a gentle breeze,
That brought a smile to your face-
You would? Wouldn't you?

What if I was your favorite flower?
Maybe in another life I can be born
As a sunflower in your yard.
I know you love sunflowers-
Does that mean you would love me too?

Maybe if I was just a vanilla ice cream,
You would have loved me,
Would you have not?

Oh wait-
I know, what if I was a puppy?
There is no way you wouldn't love me then, right?

What if I was a melody,
A song written by Hozier?
Maybe you would love me-
If I was the bright star in your sky.
Maybe if I just wasn't me-
Only if I was anything but me-
You would love me,
Would you not?

But I'll forever be me,
A hopeless romantic
Dissociating in love.
But maybe in another life-
I'll get to be
A sunflower in your yard.
Maybe in another life,
I'll be a love letter written
By the one you love,
Maybe then I'll have-
A little space in your heart.

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open flume
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So sweet! A very dulcet poem now I need to go eat a strawberry or something πŸ“

ocean sun
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Thank youu

midnight yew
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@ocean sun that's so pretty. I love it. I need to read a few more times to really get it

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If I were smarter I would tell you what I would want to

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Hahaha

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It feels like love. If you were the embodied image of what is love to said figure, then you, in fact, would be loved

ocean sun
ocean sun
midnight yew
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Hahaha

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I just recited something!

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I was super nervous but it was fun

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@ocean sun

ocean sun
ocean sun
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@mystic carbon

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Always love to hear your thoughts on writings so if you find time give it a read please

mystic carbon
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Maybe you would love me-
If I was the bright star in your sky. - u could expand on that celestial imagery more

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im not finishing giving feedback

mystic carbon
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i hope this isnt harsh its good already the way it is but i feel like the 7th stanza needs a bit of work

ocean sun
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These metaphors are mostly things that I know she loves btw so what metaphors I could use is kind of limited

mystic carbon
ocean sun
mystic carbon
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Oh wait-
I know, what if I was a puppy?
There is no way you wouldn't love me then, right?

  • like with this describe the puppy more - is it cute his eyes etc... tail
ocean sun
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She loves any puppy xD

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If it's a puppy she loves it she hates to discriminate against puppies

mystic carbon
ocean sun