#The Night’s Stand.

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fallow schooner
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Are we writing another poem or screaming to be heard

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fallow schooner
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@mellow badge is knights like nights?

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Good pickup

tawny violet
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i saw this first >:)

static wedge
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This is really good. "Or screaming to be heard" I love that whole stanza.

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*This is really good.

"Or screaming to be heard" I

love that whole stanza.*

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pulsar shard
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Beautiful poem about why we write.

"Seeping into thr sombre tree of all that have managed to weep before me", was this about this server?

I love how you personify your pen as your confidant, your friend, with which you share your pain with, because everyone else is too absurd or fake to understand.

And how you change the perspective from 1st person and 2nd person like a dialogue between you and your pen to "we", because the pen is with you in sharing your pen, it might also imply a connection to all the other poets you are posting your work in, as sort of a solidarity.

The stanzas also kept getting longer, as you kept diving deeper into the reason for poetry as well, from melancholy and pain, to solidarity with others about this being a way to feel understood, to this also being a way to protect and empower yourself from other people who don't get it or behave in apathetic ways.

"Night's Stand" (referring to knights from the last part) and with a black background, I'm assuming means that you feel compelled to pour your emotions at night, because it feels more comforting? Maybe the night is also your confidant and companion.

Also liked the rhyme between domain, sane and pain, tying them together, and the one between heard and absurd, I want to scream at the absurdity of this world a lot too. The starting of the sentences with "O" too.

I'll be honest, I didn't completely understand what "she'll write of knights" exactly meant. But I really enjoyed your poem regardless!

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I'm really bad at literary analysis, so I'd like feedback on my feedback too 🤣

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# pulsar shard Beautiful poem about why we write. "Seeping into thr sombre tree of all that ha...

Wow, I absolutely love this- thank you so much for taking the time to really understand my poem. Eye, Eye, You have a good understanding and honestly I love when people give me new insight to my poems. It’s like they have found stuff that I have looked away from or haven’t noticed.
I really loved this reflection, so thank you.

Okay, so I think you’re the second person to wonder about that last stanza.
Basically, “She’ll write of Knights” is how I write of either a saviour or sometimes I write myself as my own hero. When I write myself with hope, It fuels me. I feel empowered. I am my own Knight, I shield with my pen.

Of course, it’s all up to interpretation so really nothing you’ve said is wrong.

Thank you Ether! ❤️‍🩹🌟

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# mellow badge Wow, I absolutely love this- thank you so much for taking the time to really und...

Oh I see, knights are an image of the desire for someone (perhaps yourself) taking the time to understand you, be patient with you, and stand up for you against others!

Reminds me of the poem "Aunt Jennifer's Tigers", if you've read it. It's about an old woman writing about tigers because tigers ar fierce and independent and strong, something she craves for in her life. Very emotional touch, I love it!

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I love this one a lot actually
"She said she'll write of knights
There to keep a watch over
Those who try to diminish my light" I love that line a lot

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Great poem mysteec!

jagged solstice
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This is very powerful, I loved it. NoizeLoves

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Thank you for taking the time to read it, I hope it correlates with the both of you somewhat. ❤️‍🩹🥀

jagged solstice
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I relate to it def

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Ok this is very interesting I guess the she in this poem is you but in the third person if that make sense? which gives me introspection on ur writing and in the second stanza ur writing the pain unorderly so u can stay sane so u can heal from ur words or poems in a sense but ur asking urself if those words is for ur own peace or others absurdity which u are putting urself out for more ppl than urself in ur poetry and then the last stanza u desire to write about Knights - which are protective and give off light or hope and guidance in a sense