the forbidden fruit | The Art of Poetry | Page 1

astral pasture Mar 27, 2025, 6:01 PM

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I despise Adam and Eve
For eating a damned fruit
And now I'm stuck to believe
My loved one has gone mute
To all my affection
To my constant suppression
Of me trying to crawl back home
To where I belong
And where everything went wrong.

Forever they are to be blamed
For they are the root of why I am me
They are bound to be ashamed
For why I will never be free
From ripping my heart for anyone
And being returned as if am no one
The hands that always searched for mine
Now left scars on my body
As their curse still stains humanity.

glass spoke Mar 27, 2025, 6:05 PM

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It got the natural rhythm

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Which went missing when people try to be abstract

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It is fun but it is also confusing as no clear meaning does come out of 1st stanza

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Ok it goes from the contrarian funny blame to the pain that is hidden..

I am not being funny. Just the natural rhythm is so.

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It is a good tell

astral pasture Mar 27, 2025, 9:04 PM

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glass spoke It is a good tell

Thank you!

astral pasture Mar 27, 2025, 9:06 PM

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glass spoke It is fun but it is also confusing as no clear meaning does come out of 1st stan...

I don't know what I was experimenting it's like the point of view of a girl ar grief but trying to find something or anything to shift the blame on so that she or her loved one won't be held accountable

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@simple solar

simple solar Mar 27, 2025, 9:22 PM

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Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful

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