#“In My Armor, I Was Unstoppable”

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In my armor I was unstoppable.
Steel skin forged from lessons
that taught boys never to flinch,
never to crack under unseen weight
we carried in silence, unarmed, unprepared.

My father taught me bravery
meant showing absolutely nothing,
a clenched jaw, dry eyes,
bleeding, but never out loud,
until the silence became second nature.

Strength was an art
he taught like discipline,
like staring through stung eyes,
the art of never asking for help.
I learned to hold it,
even when it hollowed me out.

Burdens grew heavier with age,
expectations, silence, composure.
I carried it like inheritance,
as if my worth were measured
by how much I could bear.

Yet late at night,
when bravery dissolves into truth,
I remove the breastplate,
unstrap the armor piece by piece,
and breathe like I haven’t in years.

Revealing bruised and battered skin,
wounds I learned to dress, but not mend,
beneath steel too proud
to confess its own suffocation.

I wonder, truly,
if bravery is simply honesty,
if being a man
means laying the armor down,
to carry what was never meant to be silent,
to speak pain without apology.

In my armor, I was unstoppable,
but in this raw humanity…
I am alive.

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@patent belfry @night kraken :3

night kraken
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I love this narrative tone. You can hear the strain and mixed vulnerability of the story. It speaks what happens when one adheres to silence, and how one takes on adversity through pain. Thank you exxo

patent belfry
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beautifully written!!! Love the use of metaphor. Really creatively narrated the pressure of societal expectations, a great read indeed 💗

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@rough zealot @plush perch @high copper @drowsy isle

rough zealot
drowsy isle
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hushed linden
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@hushed linden

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@wicked vortex

wicked vortex
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This already snapping. ARMOR.. STEEL skin "Unforeseen WEIGHT we CARRIED in SILENCE(R), UNARMED"

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In this armor.. But with the raw humanity, I am alive.

This is dope. This is really good fam

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That sort forced view of masculinity looks like but an alternative presented. I love this

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hushed linden
# shut schooner In my armor I was unstoppable. Steel skin forged from lessons that taught boys n...

First of all, I like the theme, it's not often talked about, and it really has no distinct criteria in philosophy either
It reminds me of my poem, #1347801831027511336 , I had tried weighting down existence itself is by inherited burdens

"My father taught me bravery
meant showing absolutely nothing"
Reminds me of another one of my poems,
His hands built everything I stand on,
yet they never once rested on my shoulders
A man's quiet inheritance, expectations mislabeled as responsibilities, endurance is mistaken for strength, society does not hand a man freedom; it hands him a mold you're supposed to fit into, a script where suppression is called resilience, where composure is proof of control

"Strength was an art
he taught like discipline"
And so, a boy learns not to flinch, not to fall, only to carry, but also never experiences himself
To endure is to be worthy, to break is to fail, Society calls him unsuppressed not because he is free, but bcz he does not cry, and when a man finally finds himself despite the struggles, society labels his hardships as the bare minimum, echoing ungratefulness in the most hurtful form

And yet, "when bravery dissolves into truth" the weight of silence becomes suffocating
Men's mental health is often overlooked, hidden behind the very armor they’re praised for wearing, the scars remain unseen like they don't exist, because speaking of them is mistaken for weakness
But perhaps, as this poem suggests, true courage lies in acknowledging the wounds, in understanding that healing does not make a man any less of one!

It’s a good poem, I might have gone a bit off-theme in this feedback, but these are just my perceptions and opinions (hiding my hate towards this cruel society)
Brother to brother,
Well Written mate! 🍻

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hushed linden
high copper
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I understand this on a level not a lot of people do.

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Well done

quaint rapids
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woahhhhhh

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its soo beautifully

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written!

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like....

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i am in awe

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the way it captures the pain!

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@light depot

light depot
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Lovely narrative

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The rhythm, diction and lineations are pretty! The use of "rule of threes" are very prominent which lends their hands to support the idea of unstoppability --

Then the imagery that describes each of the phases the persona undergoes guides the readers through such a distinct journey! Well written! Lovely punctuations~

shut schooner
shut schooner
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@acoustic nimbus

acoustic nimbus
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A beautiful and truly touching poem that speaks of personal suffering that most people have endured.

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An amazing piece of writing, worth every heart it has.

rotund comet
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Your poems have great continuity

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makes it feel like every line is crucial

whole storm