#The Willow (Sonnet #52)

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covert crescent
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The Willow

I will hold you close for eternity
I promise that I will never let go
And though we lie in this gorgeous meadow
We will one day face our mortality

But when we die, we’ll transcend together
Our souls will rest underneath the willow
Rest under the afterlife’s golden glow
If I’m not careful there’ll be a tether

My soul ripped from the sky, straight into hell
Even though I resist, soon I am quelled

Even though we’re still alive, I ask you
“What if I don’t make it to God’s domain?
Forever existing tied to a chain
And forced to burn forever without you.”
You look at me, “No. You will make it through”

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@proven quiver @flat wedge @glass marsh @frozen harness @willow quartz

flat wedge
# covert crescent The Willow I will hold you close for eternity I promise that I will never let g...

Ahh i had to read it twice coz I zoned out, this poem is deeply moving, with its tender promises and haunting fears
The contrast between the serene imagery of the willow, meadow, and golden afterlife with the dread of separation and hell creates a powerful emotional pull
There's a raw vulnerability in the final lines, especially the speaker’s fear of eternal loneliness, tugs at the heart, while the partner’s reassurance offers a quiet, hopeful resolve
The only note might be to smooth a few rhythmic bumps, like

"there’ll be a tether"
But the emotion here is piercing and true
Beautiful work
__Well written__🍻

covert crescent
proven quiver
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This one resonated with me 😮‍💨 ❤️

glass marsh
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Eclipse! Little bro! Whyyy do you wanna make me cryyy😭😭this is so good😭

shell muralBOT
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*Eclipse! Little bro!

Whyyy do you wanna make me

cryyy😭😭this is so good😭*

- nevtian
glass marsh
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I'll take that as a yes

glass marsh