Poetrash36# Dear Brother

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@spark bolt @leaden palm @hazy kayak @split ridge @lament harness

[split ridge]

@crystal storm
Best poem ✨✨✨

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I'm gonna cry

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Then cry

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Have you send this to him yet?

You should

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Yes, but the response was so dry I virtually smacked him😭😭

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Smack him irl as well 😭

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I'll send you an SS:>

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Also lmao that's so him 😭

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Please do

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Lmao😆

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Thank you<33

[thorny cave]

Very cute!! The only gripe I have, which is purely grammatical, is the line “cavity on your teeth” which could be pluralized as “cavities on your teeth” or “cavity on your tooth”. Regardless, it’s a very cute poem thank you for sharing!

[crystal storm]

Thank youuuu for reading! I'm glad you liked it!
You're right, the grammar's wacky on that one, but I thought it sounded better that way, so I kinda sacrificed grammar for the rhyme lol
Thank you again! I really appreciate it:D

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@normal bramble
@copper flicker

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Nahh you can’t make me cry rn

I love my dear big sister very much

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Dw I was balling my eyes out while writing this

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I did so on my last few ngl

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Big sisters always to the rescue💪

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She’s a tough cookie !!

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I'm parcelling you hugs!!

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“Looking up parcelling”

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Like brother like sister

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Send a package, sorry I don't speak American

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💀

[hazy kayak]

Aw very sweets 😊

[grizzled flume]

This is very sweet 🥰

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Keep these things to yourself 😭

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Thank you<33

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Thanks Blanc:><3

[leaden palm]

This poem is a heartwarming tribute to sibling love, capturing the nostalgia of childhood mischief and the bittersweet pride of seeing a younger brother grow
There's an effortless rhythm in lines like

“There's that picture of us, two little kids competing for the widest grin”

A simple yet vivid image that instantly transports the reader to a time of innocence, an unhinged fragment of childhood :B

The tone is playful yet deeply sentimental, with moments like,

“Hey little idiot, do you remember the time I fought that mean boy for you?”
Results in adding a personal touch that feels raw and real
The rhymes, though subtle, create a lyrical flow that doesn’t scream poetry but instead feels like an intimate monologue, reminiscing without forcing sentimentality
The emotional weight builds with details,
“The dimples on your cheeks, the cavity on your teeth”
Where even imperfections are remembered with affection
The poem isn’t just about looking back; it acknowledges the present with pride:
“For I am proud to see you grow”
The transition from playful teasing to a heartfelt conclusion,
*“And no matter how far we’ve come, you will always be my little brother”*,
ties everything together beautifully, leaving the reader with a warm, lingering feeling

Personally, It’s a piece that doesn’t try too hard, yet succeeds in evoking deep emotions
The balance of nostalgia, humor, and unconditional love makes it a sincere and memorable read!
Well written!🍻

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Thank you for another awesome review, Austin! I feel even better after reading your feedback:>

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@wary patrol
It's not my best in the sense it's competent. It's just the closest to my heart:>

[wary patrol]

is your brother the closest to your heart?

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Ofc, he's my little bean

[wary patrol]

very sweet stuff

[wary patrol]

what’s your best one in that sense?

[crystal storm]

Hmm it's a little sensitive, but I'll tag you

[leaden palm]

Nvm ive read it🗿

[halcyon tartan]

I did enjoy . . . 🥹
So heartfelt and personal. I just know your lil’ bro has the best big sister ever, Nevtian.

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Bet💪💪💪😆

[halcyon tartan]

Gj?

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Good job

[halcyon tartan]

Oh nice

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@proper oyster

an older one, hope ya like it:>

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@latent pawn

[latent pawn]

@crystal storm what is your secret to your rhythm.

It lack a bit in the end as compared to the start

I like the lovely, relational description

It shows how the author is paying attention to unique features

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I just feel mushy and pen it down

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Tyty

[proper oyster]

Could you @me in the second one again? I lost it 😦

[crystal storm]

Ah, you mean the one called 'Colour my life blue'? Ofc!

[proper oyster]

To be honest I don't really know I know you pinged me in 2 poems.

[hexed ledge]

*To be honest I

don't really know I know you

pinged me in 2 poems.*

- christiansen_jacquelin

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Oh yeah, one was this, and I'll ping you again in the other

[proper oyster]

Thank you ^^

[proper oyster]

This is so sweet. Like yeah this poem clearly wasn't written for me. But like its still so neat ^^
Writing at uts finest.

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[deft solar]

woahhh, such a heartwarming poem

🌼 deserves flower

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you get head pats

[polar flower]

This is so LOVELY