#🍁 Limbo πŸŒ€ (or "The Autumn Manse")

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fluid ridge
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This might very much be the most insane thing I have written so far.

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radiant juniperBOT
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*This might very much

be the most insane thing I

have written so far.*

- pixbo_06
cinder glenBOT
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fluid ridge
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πŸ‚ Limbo 🍁 (or "The Autumn Manse")

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🍁 Limbo πŸŒ€ (or "The Autumn Manse")

cinder glenBOT
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@frigid sleet is now following @fluid ridge.

frigid sleet
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How did you even think of such a masterpiece?

fluid ridge
radiant juniperBOT
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*sowjajpwlanebndb you

have no idea how much this

makes me smile arghh*

- pixbo_06
fluid ridge
frigid sleet
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This is a whole 'nother level of poetry I cannot yet comprehend

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Please teach me

fluid ridge
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It is an honor!!!!

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-# if you have any questions I am happy to help you but don't boost my ego too much hehe

frigid sleet
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Lol alright, I just want to know how you write such a deep story. How do you prepare to write something like this, or do you just go with the flow?

magic jolt
fluid ridge
frigid sleet
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I am actually very similar

tired micaBOT
oblique zealot
fluid ridge
oblique zealot
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ate and left no crumbs pixboo

frigid sleet
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I think I just need to tell more a story like you. Ill try that and then ping you when I have finished it if that's alright?

fluid ridge
magic jolt
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and surely this is one of them

desert timber
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Ill have to read it

fluid ridge
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Eventually eh

tired micaBOT
desert timber
fluid ridge
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Hehehehehehehehehe

frigid sleet
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"And who'd play if they could only lose?"

I cant stop thinking about this line bro

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So amazing

fluid ridge
frigid sleet
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This poem deserves so many more likes 😭

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This is probably one of best poems here

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@fading karma

scenic forge
# fluid ridge This might very much be the most insane thing I have written so far.

Okay, I read the comments and other people's views on your poem, and I must say, you didn’t disappoit

The mirror doesn’t seem to see, and instead, she chooses to shriek at me
and yet, is it the mirror that shrieks, or is it the reflection that refuses to stay silent?
Your words feel less like ink on a page and more like something alive, something writhing between sleep and waking, pressing against the fabric of reality with just enough force to leave a crack

The duskborn ghost, it treads astray
And so do we, as readers, wandering through your haunted manse of time, through spiraling staircases that lead nowhere, through puppet houses where the announcer laughs alone
There’s no clear path, no guiding hand, only doors that appear and vanish at will
Is it poetry or is it purgatory?

You do not merely describe despair, you trap us in it

β€œAnd another day begins”
Again and again, like a bell tolling in an empty town, like the dull thud of a heartbeat that refuses to quit, even when the body has long surrendered
I almost wish I could reach in and stop it, force the loop to break, silence the echoesπŸ˜‚
But no, this is the nature of limbo, isn’t it?

"The broken dove sits in the tree, and her rotten body sings to me"
There is something uniquely cruel about your use of decay, not as an end, but as a state of existence, the lifeless is never truly lifeless, the dead never fully gone
The bird rises, the ghost lingers, the past refuses to be buried
Is death ever the conclusion, or just another room in the house?

"Who cares if things will ever last, if just another day begins?"
And there it is, that quiet surrender wrapped in a question, posed like an afterthought but heavy enough to crack the ground beneath it
Maybe you are asking
Maybe you already know the answer
Maybe the question is the point

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And then you end with,

The hourglass is blind! Do you not see, or do you refuse its apathy? You are but dust in the wind. And I am the thunderstorm!

A very smart move, u leave just enough room for the reader to decide, is this defiance or futility? A declaration of power, or the last desperate gasp of a man drowning in time? The blind hourglass, the unseen force, the refusal to submit or the inability to escape, you do not give answers, only open doors (multiple possible meanings)

A weaker poem would have chosen a side
You let the storm speak for itself
Honestly, one of the best poems I've read in this server
I really enjoyed reviewing and critiquing this one, well written🍻

fluid ridge
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you are amazing

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Oooooooh and you got it so well too

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This is a beautiful confirmation to see that I actually managed to get the frenzy across that I endeavored to convey

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I love this!

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Thank you

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Just thank you

fading karma
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Such an incredible poem to have been written and such a joy i got to read it! I am speechless by the utter intended circling backs again and again. The overall poem feels like a prophecy that's been divided into parts and are told in the beginning of each episode. I absolutely devoured this poem!

frigid sleet
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Next poem when?

scenic forge
scenic forge
fluid ridge
fluid ridge
frigid sleet
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I already follow you 😭

fluid ridge
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Another thing you should know about me: I am braindead

frigid sleet
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Braindead?

fluid ridge
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My brain is very smooth

frigid sleet
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The only that works is the poem writing lobe

fluid ridge
frigid sleet
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Well the inspiration poem I'm making is going well. It's taking an eon tho

fluid ridge
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Ooooooooo SaberSaysPretty

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Feel free to ping me

frigid sleet
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Of course

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Do u use canva to make the background?

fluid ridge
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What is canva

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All my homies use microsoft word

frigid sleet
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Bruh

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πŸ˜‚

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So how do u make it then

fluid ridge
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I write it down in word and add free pngs and different shapes and a nice background

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And then I do some funny pdf jpeg formatting

frigid sleet
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Alright

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I think I'll try canva

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Either way I'll use it cuz I use canva to make videos for yt and ig

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fluid ridge
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Ever so slightly improved version

frigid sleet
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How does one improve perfection?

fluid ridge
lapis gust
frigid sleet
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bro is so late 😭

fluid ridge
frigid sleet
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Why isn't this on the starboard

velvet plover
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bravo!

desert timber
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@desert timber

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is this the forlorn game part 2?

median solstice
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The fact this aint on the starboard is just wild @fluid ridge

fluid ridge
median solstice
median solstice
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feel free to read bro

median solstice
fluid ridge
median solstice
fluid ridge
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And as for my reviews... well, they come sluggishly

median solstice
median solstice
fluid ridge
frigid sleet
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dammit pixbo

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why are you so talented

fluid ridge
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It's been 8 months bro 😭

frigid sleet
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@spring marlin is now following @fluid ridge.

fluid ridge
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Lmao

frigid sleet
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starboard after a century