calm herald
It changed you
changed me,
changed our possibilities.
The future we yearned,
We spoke of fate,
Now swerved and delayed,
Shatteing all once layn.
Flaking plans,
Daytelled pasts,
Nesting doubts who talked of pain.
A struggled median,
Trust gingerly snapped,
Lies coat the surface,
Truth nolonger seen.
Curdled memories,
Twisted words,
Shoved back in my throat,
Choking on my thoughts.
Love spars with reality,
I cling to the taste of your poison,
Bullied by my own hope.
vapid nebula
It changed you
changed me,
changed our possibilities.
The future we yearned,
...
To be honest, I kind of resonate with this poem from my recent experiences, I love the figure of speech used here, especially the usage of multiple metaphors here. Overall, the poem is superb! love it!!
calm herald
To be honest, I kind of resonate with this poem from my recent experiences, I lo...
Thank you!! It wa my first time trying to use a more riddled speech and I'm pretty happy with how it turned out
ripe ruinBOT
Thank you!! It wa my first time trying to use a more riddled speech and I'm pret...
Wonderful! @calm herald has just pregressed to level 19!
rustic saffron
It changed you
changed me,
changed our possibilities.
The future we yearned,
...
Wow, that was brilliant! I could really sense the anger in the lines "Lies coat the surface, Truth nolonger seen" and "Trust gingerly snapped" , those particular lines really stood out for me. The rhythm of it was almost reminiscent of a nursery rhyme, Idk if you intended it that way, but I found that it perfectly captured the anger and sorrow in the rest of the poem. An excellent job!!