#"fishing", paragraph 1 | ➼ by Rain

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snow sapphire
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wrote this during a workshop - the prompt was to write the first sentences of a book about fishing

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and uhh

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voila

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i liked what came out of it, so here you go

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a block of text

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i may edit it to look more poem-y, but i like it as a paragraph tbh

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OPINIONS ARE WELCOME

frosty ledge
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This is hilarious!!

snow sapphire
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That's what I thought too

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It's so random and stream of consciousness

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Eheheh

frosty ledge
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I think the mercy line could benefit from slight rephrasing

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But it's amazing and full of wit

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Las Vegas line really hit out of nowhere

snow sapphire
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And then, if you snag a bare glimmering body, something that fishing allows you to accomplish outside of Las Vegas, you can show some humanity the way your sea-mother taught you, even if stuff with scales does not know what mercy is meant to mean.

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oh wait

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frick

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i said "meant to mean"

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💀💀💀

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lemme just pretend that didn't happen

frosty ledge
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Maybe ASthink

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Idk meant to mean is pretty funny in its own right

snow sapphire
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I didn't mean to write that

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I uhhh

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Idk...

frosty ledge
snow sapphire
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AHEM

frosty ledge
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Its good

snow sapphire
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i never write like this but i still liked what happened here, felt like posting

frosty ledge
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stuff with scales was what threw me for a loop honestly

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But it's

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Amazing

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I love witty writes

snow sapphire
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"stuff with scales"

..... ok rain

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go to bed rain

frosty ledge
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Rain

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Its amazing

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Lol

snow sapphire
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You're amazing

frosty ledge
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Its one line and one opinion

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You're literally one of the best writers I know

snow sapphire
upbeat quartz
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Why art thou A GENIUS!?

snow sapphire
upbeat quartz
snow sapphire
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I will write another and dedicate it to you

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/gen

upbeat quartz
upbeat quartz
snow sapphire
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It's called The Old House

upbeat quartz
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We need to talk.

snow sapphire
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Yes ma'am

slow beacon
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you’re a genius.

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👏

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So versatile

daring bone
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This is why I love you

snow sapphire
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Congrats on being trial mod

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:D

daring bone
daring bone
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Also, I wanna see you read this in a recital so bad lol jsksjsjsbsiosjs

snow sapphire
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I shall do it for you

daring bone
wary dust
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This is really fun, I actually love this A LOT, this is really good rain

little haven
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Ahahah this is amazing

It reads as if an old, grumpy fisherman decided to write a book about fishing but he puts everything bluntly and harshly; plenty of insults, but the best advice youll ever receive.

(Or a very serious book where fishing is only posed as a facade to a deeper social problematic but i dislike the thought. So funny fish man it is)

snow sapphire
snow sapphire
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funny fish man with a critical view on society BlindEvil

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imagine BlindEvil

little haven
snow sapphire
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Okay

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You do you

little haven
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BAHAHAHA

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No i just like the idea of the fisherman just being grumpy as hell and any social commentary is purely accidental

snow sapphire
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Yes

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That's perfect

honest spindle
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Liked it, and relatable for the last twisting line ! But anyway, poor little worm uglysobbing

snow sapphire