#Sometime, 1985

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topaz patrol
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Mom needs a new electric broom
I’m her child and I go with
It must be the weekend because I’m not at school
Or this could be vacation, on woodland drive

I ask if I can sit in the back back
Of the red station wagon
Mildew scent and faux leather
No seatbelt, red polypropylene rugs
Silver hinges where the jump seats can come up

We drive by tangled woods where no one goes
I wonder what’s beyond my little world
Passed my pediatrician’s office on the way to the store
There she asks the man if this one vacuums corners
I drift off into daydreams staring into space
The man doesn’t regard me
I don’t wonder about his life

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rugged fable
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there's something quite scrumptious about this poem

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not sure if 'back back' was a typo or if it's something I don't know of, but other than that - there's nothing I can find to criticise here. just lovely

topaz patrol
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thanks very much... its intentional, maybe needed quotation marks

topaz patrol
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I wish there was a neutral tag between comments wanted and not wanted. Wanted sounds needed, not wanted sounds antisocial

rugged fable
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Yeah I agree; sorry if I wedged in with criticism where it wasn't welcome. I was just curious as to the meaning of 'back back'; I understand, I believe, what you meant by it now.

topaz patrol
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its just what we called the very back of the car, the storage area without seats, when I was a kid

rugged fable
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yeah that's how I understood it after you said the first time