#Dried ink

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valid heron
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The Blue ink that runs into my veins,
Splashes sometimes to define you although it pains,
Your sweet words echoing in my seldom,
Symphony of your voices, how adorable,
But your action harsh,
They carved some scars,
You know, your deeds,
They slaughtered a dream ?

Was I not of a caliber your high?
Fake laughs and giggles made my misery morseful,
Your warm red blood consumed the blue ink of mine,
A drop of water was all i had,
Yet i gave you that to quench your thirst,
You blamed me for not erasing the ache,
Lying near you i took the blame,
Sorry for not quenching your thirst,
Dying in the sand with the guilt of that,

The scorching sun burning afar,
The rays fell on me,
They evaporates because my ink was burning on another level,
Dried ink how will i live ?

marsh geyser
valid heron
heavy dome
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Oooohh interesting structure! Just a lil trimming maybe? BUT THIS IS SUBJECTIVE THO
For e.g.
Blue ink gallops through my veins,
'n splash to define you with pains,
Your sweet words echoes in my seldom,
Symphony of your voices, "how adorable",
But
Yours actions harsh,
They carved scars,
You know, your deeds,
Slaughtered a dream?

Was I not of the caliber you defined?
Plastic laughs and giggles made my misery morseful,
Your warm red blood consumes blue ink of mine,
A drop of water was all i had,
Yet i gave you that to quench your thirst,
You blamed me for not erasing the ache,
Lying near you i took the blame,
Sorry, I was a mirage lake
Couldn't quench your 'far away' thirst or ache
Dying in the sand. Guilty for your sake

The scorching sun burning afar,
The rays fell on me,
Evaporating as my ink singed my pores,
Dried ink...how do I live ?

heavy dome
valid heron
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structure seems fine now,

heavy dome
heavy dome
valid heron
valid heron
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i have other pieces too, if you want to go through them as well

heavy dome