Hey, I need a book tok girl's opinion on something I wrote. | The Art of Poetry | Page 1

last salmon · 2025-01-14T03:27:32.823Z

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last salmonBOT Jan 14, 2025, 3:27 AM

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tropic stag Jan 14, 2025, 11:35 AM

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no just no this made me inwardly cringe no offense :DDDDDDDD✨✨✨✨

nimble stone Jan 14, 2025, 2:45 PM

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tropic stag no just no this made me inwardly cringe no offense :DDDDDDDD✨✨✨✨

Thank you lol someone said I should try to write something like this so I gave it a try lol

tropic stag Jan 14, 2025, 2:47 PM

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yuh

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good job for branching out but😭

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i died thats an accomplishment

crisp pond Jan 15, 2025, 12:31 AM

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Awful

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It has a weird tension

visual narwhal Jan 22, 2025, 9:09 AM

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I mean maybe it would make sense in context with something else but it would still be a more concerning sort of line than a romanticised one

slate oriole Jan 22, 2025, 5:27 PM

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Not a booktok girly but your poem (an alright attempt) doesn't really make a whole lot of sense. That is probabaly because if you were cupping her face, she would be looking at you- as you would directly be infront of her. And inconisties like that can really deter a reader. I see what you were fling for but maybe give it a another try? I'm sure somw people dif this kind of stuff. From what I know this kind of writing is found in like the new (a specific division of) romance books

#Hey, I need a book tok girl's opinion on something I wrote.