#Evolution Of A Dumb Root

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soft mortar
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I was a stupid flower once, sitting in
A flowerpot with my blue and gray petals
Shut under a porch where the sun turns away from me.
I barely could sing my ABCs. I was never like—

The bright flowers; I was a black flower
Pulled aside to wither. They’d hauntingly laugh at me,
A dark corner was my shadow’s pet, feasting on me
Little by little, like hungry bees. I didn’t want

To hide from the sun or the sun to hide from me
I wanted it to look at me, so it could bloom
My dull stems and petals. The pine trees didn’t believe
Or too much care about me.

They mock and throw rocks at me.
I couldn’t read the stars or count them clearly.
I’d say 23 stars instead of 3; the moon would tease me
If the donkey knocks my flowerpot

Over—I’d weep terribly on the ground—
Like a black clown. I wanted to show the moon
That I was brighter than the stars, but the moon
Gave up on me. I was too embarrassed to look at me.

I was a caveman without any identity.
My words would poison my soil; I would droop and stare
At my dumb roots, drowning in the puddles.
I was a stupid flower once…

But Mother Earth never gave up on me!
She taught my roots and gave my stems some food.
She even gave me a handbook with words and rules.
Now I bloom towards the moon like a moonflower—

And I can see the stars perfectly too.

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soft mortar
# soft mortar I was a stupid flower once, sitting in A flowerpot with my blue and gray petals ...

POEM BREAKDOWN: Ok a little breakdown about this poem, so Mother Earth is the metaphor for my actual mother here - and the food symbolizing the power source to fuel my brain to learn and the handbook is like the dictionary and math book with words and rules- so the sun - and black flower here represents the black sheep of the group or the outcast - so the sun (teacher) turned away from me and put me in the back of the class (pulled me aside to wither in the dark corner) - Black clown is the same interpretation of black sheep or an awkward person crying in the ground and portrayed as a clown/laughing stock - I'd say 23 stars instead of 3 stars because im 23 now and 3 to keep that same rhyme going

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and the bright flowers symbolize the students laughing at me and i use the moonflower here as transformation from being dumb to being brighter towards the moon as the title says evolution of a dumb root

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@silver dragon

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and i said *a dark corner was my shadow's pet *-- that the sadness or bleakness was my shadow's owner because i had no identity as in the latter line: I was a caveman without any identity

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tiny gale
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I feel the evolution and the environment of the black flower. It reminds me of Hans Cristian Endersen somehow.

tiny gale
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The man who wrote "Le vilain petit canard"

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vast geyser
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Such interesting metaphors and imagery! Nicely penned

glad orchid
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interesting analogy

thick halo
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The transformation into a moonflower, one that can now bloom confidently and see the stars clearly, is deeply moving.

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Thank you for sharing such a vulnerable and hopeful piece. Your words remind me that even when we feel like we’re withering, there’s potential for renewal and beauty within us. No flower, no matter its color or condition, is ever truly "stupid." You’ve captured a universal truth in such a tender, memorable way.