The King of a Hollow Kingdom

[static turtle]

hey

so

this is good ngl, like im tearing up

[feral crater]

yeah?

[feral crater]

really

[static turtle]

wait imma read it again, cause damn that hit home

wow

damn man, congrats

are you ok?

lmao

[feral crater]

lol not really.....but it's part of the journey

[delicate fog]

Wonderful! @feral crater has just pregressed to level 4!

[static turtle]

felt that

well if you need to vent my dms are open

[feral crater]

wait...fr?

[static turtle]

yea fr

lmao

[marsh kite]

Please don't extra ping me here. I had your ping from earlier.

[fluid coral]

It is veryy good reading

[feral crater]

Thanks bro

[keen marsh]

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[vocal sinew]

@feral crater bro this is so peak and i have some thoughts of putting my own aspect to continue this journey of your cuz i feel like i can relate a lot so i was just gonna ask your permission is i can do a continuous of a part in a positive aspect, and only send that to you

[feral crater]

AbsoluteLY

[keen marsh]

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[fierce jay]

Damnnn broo.. first of all I REALLY REALLY LOVE THIS AS A POEM!!! Especially the flow, and the metaphor of kingdom which collapased later. You really wrote it so well!!! The whole kingdom thing is my fav part.

I love the metaphors like cardboard kingdom, flat tired bus. They all really potrays how life feels growing up. The cardboard kingdom shows how our childhood dreams were just delusionals and the flat tired bus shows how life is a unpredictable bumpy ride out of our control.

You portrayed everything so well, I litreally felt like I was a part of the journey too! Like everything was flshing before my eyes.
This is legit so vivid and honest journey from powerful dreams to comfortable surrender.

The voice of narrator in the starting arc is so strong and nostalgic, really gives the poem the emotional depth.

I like the structure too! The gradual erosion of hope feels so smooth like sand slipping through fingers. The shift from supreme king in child to couch philosopher was smooth and felt so natural.

Honestly I really got to learn alot abt your perspective from this.
I felt like it wasn't like you gave up but more like you choosed to not get tangled or engaged anymore. Like you didn't wanted waste your energy.
I like the enlightenment joke at the end, Idk it somewhat feels like you are laughing so you don't cry? There's pain in these lines but also a fire.

Really thank you for sharing this poem with me
This was real and raw that imma tear up

Here's a virtual hug for everything you been through🫂💙

[feral crater]

Damnnnnnnnn bro😹… I don’t even know how to respond to this properly You read it.. like not just skimmed it, but felt it. The fact that you caught the little metaphors (the cardboard kingdom, the flat-tired bus, the couch philosopher shift) it’s crazy because those were pieces of myself(then) I didn’t think anyone would truly see. But you did. And you understood. (I genuinely didn't think anyone below 17-18 would get it since it's too real yk)

And you're right... it wasn’t really about giving up, more like choosing to observe instead of fight battles that cost too much of me. Laughing at the end, not because it’s funny, but because it’s the only thing left to do when the tears don’t fall anymore yk

Thank you for taking the time to feel it with me and I hope you learn something from it...oh and the hug too 🫂 (Also I wrote this 3 years ago, I have hope now lol)

[fierce jay]

Honestly it was such a honour to read this poem. I really read this poem with my full attention! So I'm really gla dI was able to give a proper feedback and understand the depth of the poem i'm gald I was able to understand this piece! And hey you underestimated me lol😆

Really thank you, I'm gald I got to read such deep and poetic piece🥹💗

[fierce jay]

"Choosing to ovbserve instead of fighting battles that cost too much of me" that line itself is so deep. This one hits hard. It's like you learned to preserve your peace even if the world called it "giving up." That's not weakness but wisdom
Idk what you been through but here's another hug🥹🫂💗

[fierce jay]

The fact that you wrote this three years ago and still managed to capture this much soul🥹💗

I'm honestly so glad tou have hope now, cuz you deserves that. You really do.
Thank you for letting me walk through that poem with you.

[feral crater]

I'm glad... I just want people who just graduated highschool or college to know it's completely normal to feel this way after graduation only if they don't plane to remain that way

[feral crater]

Also I'm sorry for underestimating you bro😆

[fierce jay]

That's such a great message behind the poem!!! (* >ω<)💗💗💗💗

When I will graduate from highschool, I will definetly look it up again

[fierce jay]

It's okay! I forgive you lol😆😂