#Order, unbreakable

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fluid mulch
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Order, unbreakable

                              ——A poem for Hoshimi Miyabi

Alone on the path,
Sleet falls on the Star Palace,
night lingers on.

Dawn breaks the early light,
Morning rays pour out, reflecting beauty,
Apricot eyes burn like flames.

Blade gleams with sharpness,
Dancing with broken branches, bathed in flying frost,
Wind, flowers, snow, and moon all unfold.

Foxfire burns the heart,
Hoshimi's pride sharpens the clear sea,
Void Hunter's fame spreads.

Alone on the path,
Sleet falls on the Star Palace,
Sword shadows fall, frost remains.

Original Chinese version:

秩序，不可破

                                     ——献给星见雅的一首诗

独行小径中
霰落星殿夜未央
烈霜破夜长

初晓碎黎明
晨辉尽洒映芳容
杏眼炽如焰

刃光现锋芒
折枝轻舞沐飞霜
风花雪月放

狐火燎心房
星见骄子砺澄沧
虚狩远名扬

独行小径中
霰落星殿夜未央
剑影残落霜

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@cyan spruce @tender kindle @azure socket @vagrant mango @viral bloom

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@hybrid schooner @shrewd hinge @grave charm @silk relic @wide condor

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@velvet sage @quick viper @last wadi @gritty viper

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@weary quest @languid kelp @agile lily @fringe stream

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@weary thorn @placid osprey @zinc condor @shut patio @royal flint

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@stone mural

stone mural
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ws poem

fluid mulch
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@last wadi @vagrant hill @cursive karma

tender kindle
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Cool poem

vagrant hill
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I think its a very nice poem! Nice job translating it! heartpotat heartpotat heartpotat

jade yewBOT
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@velvet sage is now following @fluid mulch.

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@fluid mulch is now following @velvet sage.

velvet sage
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thnx

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soon i'll look into this poem

velvet sage
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very nice

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very nice poem

fluid mulch
# velvet sage very nice poem

thanks for the compliment!
though it's a bit hard to translate it into English version
cuz this time the poem is haiku style

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it follows the 5-7-5 syllables rule

velvet sage
fluid mulch
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called haiku

velvet sage
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oh i've heard of haiku

fluid mulch
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the first sentence contains 5 syllables

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the 2nd contains 7
and the 3rd contains 5

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that's a basic rule of haiku

velvet sage
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hmm

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interesting

fluid mulch
velvet sage
fluid mulch
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it refers to seasonal expressions used to indicate spring, summer, autumn, winter, or the new year

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ofc there are haikus that don't have seasonal words
called free haiku

velvet sage
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hmm alr

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maybe one day i'll try it

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3 lines feels too short to me

fluid mulch
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its first sentence is normal 5-7-5 syllables

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called the starting sentence

velvet sage
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hmm

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i see

fluid mulch
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and the second part is called the side sentence
which contains 2 sentences with 7 syllables

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the 3rd and 4th sentence is the repetition of the first two

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finally the ending sentence is another 7-7 syllables

velvet sage
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interesting

fluid mulch
velvet sage
fluid mulch
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i like Masaoka Shiki or Kobayashi Issa's work

fluid mulch
velvet sage
fluid mulch
fallow aurora
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i will check it after exam

shut patio
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Impressive! I like the imagery! I'm a little concerned with apricot eyes being interpreted too literlaly to mean actual apricots but I suppose that could be fine in a magical relaism type of way. nice job!

fluid mulch
shut patio
fluid mulch
viral bloom
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i just pulled a miyabi

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YAYYYy

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W POeM

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:DDDDDDDDDDDDD

fluid mulch
fluid mulch
fluid mulch
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@cerulean warren

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@young badger @vague river @molten knoll @stable igloo @wild ridge @last wadi

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@twin parrot

twin parrot
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Nice poem✨️

fluid mulch
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for the compliment

cerulean warren
fluid mulch
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遵循五·七·五的音节规则

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很多俳句连起来的就叫连歌，是日本的一种诗歌形式

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但是这个没有完全按照规矩来 没有起始句和末尾句