#A Perfect Puzzle

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untold plover
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Life sits with me,
a quiet companion at the edge of thought.
It speaks in riddles, soft whispers
of meaning scattered like fallen leaves.

What is simplicity?
A stone smoothed by the river’s patience,
a bird flying without asking why.
But we, seekers of truths,
build towers of questions
higher, endless
until they crumble beneath their own weight.

Each moment arrives uninvited,
chaotic,
like rain striking the earth in uneven rhythms.
Some drops nourish,
some flood,
yet all belong to the storm.

Does life make sense?
Perhaps it never tried to.
Its beauty lies in the jagged edges,
the missed beats of a song
that still lingers sweetly in the air.

We trip, we rise, we dream.
In the end,
it all fits
a puzzle of misplaced pieces,
perfect in its imperfection.

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distant cliff
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I love your metaphors! Well done!

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Id say the questions break up the flow in some sections

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But other than that its gorgeous

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Notably 'what is simplicity?'

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But don't take my word for it lol

stray mason
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I love this line: We trip, we rise, we dream.

distant cliff
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The second stanza is my favorite aedgy_dance

untold plover
distant cliff
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I love the poem it's beautiful

untold plover
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thanks and i really appreciate your honest suggestion. i tried to represent the life through my structure that's why flow is uneven at some point but narrating this piece altogether sounds beautiful for me..

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@grave nexus
@mystic lotus

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@charred mesa

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@mild mango

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@lofty phoenix

@raven pecan

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@high bronze

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@craggy fiber

distant cliff
untold plover
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@meager nymph

mystic lotus
graceful spoke
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A good metaphor for learning to accept life as it comes. We watch the birds in a sense, civilize no matter their chaos or conditions.

void bluff
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You have some nice metaphors here, I don't have much to say except you repeat the word "edge" a little too much, which could be a missed opportunity to use a new word or concept, especially since this is a relatively short poem. But it's up to you!

high bronze
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"What is simplicity?" Is definitely an evocative rhetorical question evoke the philosophical essence in your readers 🙂 REAL

mild mango
untold plover
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@timid zinc

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@wind condor

craggy fiber
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❤️👏

raven pecan
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a contemplating piece, i like it

frank helmBOT
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@raven pecan is now following @untold plover.

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@raven pecan is now following @craggy fiber.

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@raven pecan is now following @sullen zealot.

sullen zealot
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It speaks to the quiet moments of introspection where we try to make sense of our existence, but like the falling leaves or the rain, it’s all fleeting and ungraspable.

raven pecan
sullen zealot
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untold plover
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@burnt thunder

wind condor