this talks about the struggle of religion and the struggle of society as a whole
#God VS Man
violet coyote
pure shoal
this talks about the struggle of religion and the struggle of society as a whole
It's good. You could use punctuation to make the rhythm better, I like the structure of the poem. You perfectly portray what you want to, you've done a great job in describing the society here. The imagery is good, could be better. Metaphors need some work, I think it would add more depth to the poem.
It makes sense how you said we pray yet God does not look after us but down on us in your poem. You did a good job. I like it.
But I do think this should be in sensitive poetry as many wouldn't like the topic of this poem, it's a sensitive topic for many